Discussion of "What is it with Crazies and Darkness !?" by yur1

This is fantastic writing. Creepy to the max. Please contact me when you write your second chapter. I haven't read anything this good on SM in quite some time. Your dialogue and ability to give one visuals as if they are actually seeing it is simply amazing.

Thanks theblackhand. The creepiness probably stems from it's basis on a real experience. ;)

I love "death-wish dog walkers"! I tacked on the next leg of Peter's slalom. Let me know what you think.

Could you help me understand this portion: "He'd decided to push the boat out this year and get the top of the range lights." Thanks.

Hi Inablecipher, thanks for adding on to the story. Thought "to push the boat out" was a fairly common colloquial expression, meaning to spare no expense or apply maximum effort. Not sure of the origins, but I like to believe it comes from activities of Defoes' "Robinson Crusoe", where if he actually pushed his makeshift boat out into the water, it meant he wasn't planning on going back.

Excellent writing, yur1! You did a fantastic job of building tension..releasing it when he realized the rustling noise was his jacket...and then brought that tension back with the cliff hanger ending! Really well done.

I admit the "push the boat out" threw me a little bit, too...lol

Yur1 cheers! Thanks for filling me in on that. I really had never heard "push the boat out," and I always embrace and appreciate colloquialisms. They add color. I was thinking about docking another slolam onto Peter's adventure, but maybe you would like to take it up, and we can thread it like that. Maybe rack up a number of reads and ratings in the process. Tell me what you think. Oh and keep pushing the boat out on your creative efforts!

Terrifically written. Bring me up….edge me down…shoot me back up. Great job.