Discussion of "Normalcy" by yawanur

I loved it and I'm intrigued if slightly nervous to find out what happened to her. Brilliantly written from start to finish. I wondered if some of the longer sentences towards the end, when you're describing her appearance, were too long but they're not overly descriptive and have rhythm and that's what you need when you've got the blues. Write on.

By "overly descriptive" I actually mean "annoyingly descriptive", which they're not because you're not describing a piece of toast or something trivial like that. The repetition of "candy cane" works perfectly once you let us know that the mittens are missing from a set.