I like where the story is going and I find August to be a very interesting character, however in this chapter I felt like some of the plot didn't ring true.
August is a little girl but she also is very strong and one who can't be tricked easily. It took the librarian numerous conversations just to get a name out of her. So to have August just allow a man, whose emotions scared her at first (and you also hinted that he may have done something that is causing him great distress), to drag her around seems out of character.
But, that is just my opinion. There's also a lot of grammatical and spelling errors but I think we all have made a few of those ourselves when pushing out chapters.
I also want to clarify how good I think this story is. I haven't been able to get into a story on here in quite some time so kudos on writing a very interesting story :)

I like the emphasis on people's emotions. It allows you to build character in even the smallest of roles; i.e the librarian....very nice chapter indeed xD

Brand new Darkness Never Felt So Good titled: A New Beginning
http://storymash.com/u/xfionax/tipevawu/

Is there any reason why we cannot bring back the contests without the reward money (or whatever the reason for the contests being put on hold)?

I miss that about this site. I'm sure there are plenty of writers who would like the opportunity to participate in a contest even if there really isn't a prize.

Thanks for the comment WWB!

I definitely understand what you're saying. Directly addressing the audience does pull the reader from the story and it's something I just threw in because that's how I saw the story. It's highly unconventional but I'm pretty sure all of my writing is ;)

I'll pull the comments for this next chapter but if I miss them too much they may pop out again xD

Again, thanks for reading and commenting :)

This story was beautiful in a sad way. I like the twist on the whole vigilante thing. This is a very nicely written chapter.

This was lovely in a sad way. I liked the pacing once the story got into her history. Can't wait to see what's next :)

I went back to where it all began....my first story: So Much Blood.

critiques are welcome!

http://storymash.com/u/xfionax/bapokise/

The jump from the first chapter to this one is a bit jarring....that being said, I liked where it ended up. The characters played nicely off each other. It was very believable and definitely made the storyline even more interesting. Nice chapter :)

I love how grossed out I am about this. Very nice chapter. Kate is freaking me out though. She's so calm as if the dude in her bed is completely normal...not, you know, a rotting corpse. Well done!