Discussion of "My name is Scotty" by wsells

this rang so true, I really believed what the character was saying - nice touch with the whole 'I don't know why I'm telling you this' part, too.

thanks, Ben!

It said... "It's too early to leave the chapter!"

This was a teaser for a teaser, the Batman insignia six months before the movie's release and three months before commercials aired on TV, the cheese-ketchup drips you lick from your fingers before actually biting into the burger. I like the first-person schitzo narrator and there's plenty of potential, but the story hasn't started yet. A few more paragraphs and you have a beginning. Right now, it's merely a "be."

You know I love your openers, Sells, but you clicked the Submit button too early this time. (2.5)

lol

I agree with Nash. (I think that's the first time I've posted those words in that particular order. I'll try not to do that again.)

Loved the narrator's voice, but still waiting for the story to begin.

Ditto... Great voice, honest, funny, innocent but not. Very nicely done, but if I were a guy I'd totally have blue balls;)

Yeah, it was a "nooner."

You have something good here. Write the next chapter soon man.