Discussion of "October Chill: "Good Morning!"" by wsells

Wow! What a blow to the gut. This was really intense, sentence after sentence. Nice flow.
'good morning' came a mans voice.
I freaking got chills!
'swiper no swiping!'
solid solid five star. loved it.

Oh, Yeah! "I threw back the covers so hard the remote control for the bedroom television flew into the air..." Any idea how many times I've done that? lol. "He took a cup of hot chocolate from Susan and kissed her slowly, licking her upper lip as he pulled away. He turned his head slightly and winked at me." Talk about visual, detailed hallucination! Fantastic chapter, wsells!

Now what? This is the question that preoccupies my mind. It figures that I'd have to follow a really great mash! I really like the switcheroo at the end -- it's like you put him into his own personal hell. Very good job!

Thanks, gang! Yeah, Shadow - Sorry, I may have taken it too far, but if anyone can swing it safely to the next point, it's you. Smarm Smarm

Jeez - I have to follow Dog and the kids are at the back door!!!

Absolutely fantastic. I love how everyone has delivered so far... Going back and reading my own, I kind of feel like mine is the weak link so far... lol... anyway, very impressive indeed...

Oh God, that last scene was brutal. And the tension leading up to it... Wow am I glad you're in this game!

Sells - I always enjoy your openers. You nail down characters with flair, provide a feasible twist, and set up your afters beautifully. Involving the preacher as more a participant than a memory - good work. Lingering on him licking her lip? Demented. Creeeepy. Niiiice. (5)

What can I say? Fantastic man. You are definitely a helluva storyteller. 5 for sure.