Discussion of "October Chill: Olly, Olly, Oxen Free" by wsells

I see this is still draft...I assume you may be revising, but if not....waay, ok. I love how you continued the scene at the door and tied up the appearance of what he believed to be his own children with the "Allen brothers". The last two lines are really great!! Super job on short notice!

PS...I'll have to come back to vote, but I'd do that anyway to see if you changed the draft in any way!

OK...no changes that I can see (recall). Need I tell you my vote? LOL

Thanks WW!

You managed to make this a little creepy and very touching at the same time. Great work!

I take it you didn't like the idea of raising the dead?

This was an excellent way to "undo" dog's spooky resurrection. It's very believable, and creates an emotional response of sheepishnes in the reader. Kind of an "oh- I knew that" feeling. "Yeah, I knew they couldn't be back from the dead. Could they? The guy's just crazy. Right?" It leaves a little doubt, but breaks the momentum building toward the supernatural explanation.

It re-establishes disbelief, which will allow someone else to shock the reader anew with a supernatural twist (if someone else so desires.)

I'm voting a 3. This is a good chapter, but something this short would have to be rather spectacular to warrant a 4 or 5. No disrespect at all intended. I do think a long, good chapter probably requires more time and effort on the part of the author than a very short, good chapter.

Great continuation... I'm wondering where this will be by the time I get to it...lol...

wsells, forgive me for not being more familiar with your work...I liked this. Short, but good. I give it a 4...I am honored to be amongst all these different talents.

hey wsells, trying to catch up on everyones submissions. This was a little short however it got the job done. I really enjoyed the title and its tie in with the last sentence.