Discussion of "October Chill: One to Remember (4)" by wsells

"Pushy little ****..." Incredible, I think your character sounded a little more like the original and like Nash's and that is deffinitely a good thing! I love the twist too that the poor kid is hearing Andrew's ghosts. A big fat 5!

great continuation... I was actually left at a loss of where to head with it... that's why it sat so long as a draft...lol... way to pick up the ball and run though...thought this was awesome

Thanks Psych - When I read your draft I felt his depravity swing in a slightly different direction. Had to take a shower and then hope you didn't change it :-)

And thanks, Honey G.!

Dude...this was so great!
It’s like he’s just accepted his role as a lunatic now. The medication, rather than stopping the madness, only seems to calm him so that he can deal with better…effectively making it not so much madness at all…but REAL EVIL.
I love how he’s going to start working with the Preacher now. ‘fix’n’ some things over at the neighbors house. Beautiful!
Terrific internal dialogue:

“I can show you some tricks. I make things disappear.”
“The door locked again. I grinned. He scowled.”
And then finally this… “He'll be over it probably sooner than you think."
Ominous foreshadowing perhaps. I have a feeling Charlotte and Thomas may be in for a rough afternoon.

It's amazing how you've all kept the original tone of the storyline. It's sometimes difficult to believe that several people are writing each storyline...lol. Excellent writing, here and I agree with dog....methinks Charlotte and son are in for a rough day!

This was great. Fantastic storytelling. And now its my turn...Hope I do it justice. All of you guys kick ****!!!

We have similar writing styles. We are both straightforward and to the point.