Discussion of "The Contractor" by wsells

I like a good deception tale - it actually took me a few paragraphs to realize the Contractor's occupation until the D.C. paragraph. Dense me.

Hope I kept the same feel in chapter two. Because you didn't name your lead, he's now "Marty." Now you know.

In the interest of transparency, I voted for your story and I gave it a 4.

Hear, hear. I actually started reading the mash follow up chapter and stopped after one paragraph to read the original. Like it....
I also this "transparency" voting that several have started doing. In that light...I gave this a 4, too.

I concur, I gave it a four. Very nice set up.

a little distracted by the format…some sentences are just chopped off in the middle and continued on the next line. (?) I’ve seen it before on other chapters too so its probably no fault of the author. More likely a storymash thing…or my browser. ??
Anyhow, thought it was very well written and intriguing. I live in FL and remember a story about this some years back…con men raking in the dough masquerading as vets, etc. Big business. I like how he works two states!
And a nice cliffhanger ending. I love when you find a good story like this and see that there are several MASH chapters to follow. Awesome!
As for voting, seems the new trend is to advise what you rate so…I slapped in a fitting 4.

thanks all and thanks for the additions. I'm having fun watching it grow.

I'm new to storymash... I like concept of this site, many great stories! As for this one, I vote 4 as great presentation and description of characters occupation.

I have to laugh at myself for not picking up on the hustle sooner. I like this...off to the next chapter. It is interesting how the stories lead you around this site.