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Discussion of "take a hit think a bit" by writinghobo


1 writerwannabe 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

Seriously great, WH! Using past "peaceniks", lyrical lines of song and weaving them together for the message....was genius!

I especially liked the reference "rote armee fraktion"...RAF! They started off with the right idea, just a shame that the followers of the original group became nothing more than cheap killers.


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1 BazookoJones 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

I need a cheap smoke and some wine. Thanks hobo, always inspiring ! :)


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1 writinghobo 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

cheap smoke is always good.. wine depends on the situation! haha :D thanks baz


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1 dogdeity11 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

This piece seems conflicted emotionally, which I thought was truly awesome. From giving confident instructions on how to live, to full on self-loathing.
I felt an honesty that was refreshing. Which makes me really curious: Is this how the poet really sees things or did they just write a very good fictional poem?
Not that it really matters I suppose. I loved it either way.


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1 writinghobo 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

this is how the poet really sees things. the poet is striving for utopia but hasnt found a vessel to get there!
thanks for the comment dog.


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1 theblackhand 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

cheap smoke...a writer's power. I am blown away by your work here lately man.


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1 honeygloom 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

Isn't that what the hippies did? Sit around smoking pot and thinking and ending up doing nothing. The piece is lyrical and like Eleven said it seems conflicted. Although I fail to see the wisdom in it, I like it. Nicely done.


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1 writinghobo 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

well yeah thats what the hippies did, but they tried. our generation is too scared to try to do anything.. but what i meant to say is if there is something done, not this peaceful demonstration ****, but rather something that would leave a bigger impact on our leaders and whoever we want to reach.


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1 Thelestro 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

you are good


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1 cjbishop 4 years, 5 months ago Reply

Excellent poem, the rhythm created a quickening pace for me. As if the words were rushing out, bursting to fall upon listening ears. Great job


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1 Squrlbt 2 years, 10 months ago Reply

nice poem. It's a great read over a couple of tokes.


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