Discussion of "The Adventures of Lil' **** and Me, Doctor Michael Gavin 2" by writerwannabe

Alright mister, first off let me start off by saying my Rory does not explode thousands of mushy boogers from her nose! That's just nasty! Don't you know that girls don't have boogers, just like we don't pass gas! I swear.... LOL

Now, wow! Took this to a whole new level huh? ;) I got to say, I didn't expect the neding, with her not knowing anything going on and whatnot. Well done. There is one tinsy-winsy issue (and trust me it's porbably just me) but you seemed to have lost some of your pacing as with the first one. It didn't seem on the same track. Not bad or anything, just something I noticed and wondered about. Intentional or oops? Anyway, I hope you're continueing this, cause you've got some making up to do with the boogers my friend! LOL

TYPO *ending*

and *probably* ah, what the hell, you know me!

One of the things I've always admired about Texas women...no boogers and no farts! Well, except for this one time when....no, I won't bore you with those particular details...lol.

I am really glad, though, that my "nose honking" scene got the attention I was looking for..;o) You're right about the pacing. I noticed it, it was not intentional so, I guess it was an "oops". I wasn't able to get into the same mind set as in the first chapter (it was several months ago, after all...lol).

Not to sweat the goofs in your comments, we all do it. I'd sure rather get comments with errors than none at all...;o). Thank you, very much, Lady!

I found this fabulous. The pace did indeed seem to change and in my opinion, it seemed to speed up tenfold. Or that was just how good the story sucked me into. I did really enjoy the fact that Rory seems oblivious to this darker side you are revealing and that Lil **** seems to be more of a Lil Savior than just a pestering nuisance.

And I would have to testify against you, LadyLuck. Lol. My little girl will be proof enough that boogers do in fact exist within the feminine nose. :D but then again...maybe she inherited that from me? o0"

My ego swells! Thank you, CJ! Loved the comment about your little girl and boogers...lol.

I think I'm going to (finally)do a complete story here, one - maybe two more chapters. Hopefully, I can provide a truly surprising ending...;o)

Hey wwb...this is quite interesting. Rory screws them and then they turh to husks? You sick **** you! Very well thought out! I am so glad to see you still going strong. My favs besides you(dog and honey) seems to be on a hiatus.
I have something I am brewing I will post soon. You still kick **** man! I see you posted 2 nore chpts, which I will get to tomorrow.
On another note, I saw a writer on the stories page by the name of wannabewriter...coincidence perhaps, or are you being like King did when he was Richard Bachman?

When writing in this genre, being called a "sick ****" is quite a compliment!! Thanks, TBH!! ;o)
I hope you'll be equally enamored with the next two chapters and I'll be looking for your next post, too!

No...wannabewriter...just missed the boat. I got here first (over two years ago)...lol. I imagine he/she wanted writerwannabe but I beat him/her out. It ain't me...ummmm, well, let me go see how good he/she is....LOL.

Oh, I hate when I don't spell check1 I meant "turn" and "more."

I found it great. At first I was thinking to myself what a perverted little story. But then, I continued to read and it pulled me in. Very creative. I especially liked how you put your reader right there. Good descriptions. Keep up the good work.

Thanks, MNS! Seems I've been remiss in reading your posts and welcoming you to SM. I'll do so...soon! ;o)

I love a "perverted little story". And this one is no exception, WWB!

LOL...thanks, DJ...;o)