Discussion of "As Luck Would Have It - 2" by writerwannabe

Sweet addition WWB! And thank heavens for it, too, because I was surely stuck on this one! I had an idea where I was going, but couldn't spit it out, LOL. I love the twist in it. Makes me wonder what I might do faced with the same situation.....

Very glad you liked it, RG...;o). Lots of avenues branching off, now...wanna go at it again?

I didn't capture the voice in your first chapter. Truthfully, after the first few paragraphs, I didn't try anymore. Your "female writing male" character was so well done that my "male writing male" couldn't compare. I couldn't get any of the..well, for lack of a better word - tenderness into John...lol.

Maybe you or someone will tell us what he does in this situation. I know what I would have John do..but, I'll wait for someone else's ideas...;o)

This is a GREAT follow up Chap. Very well written. I enjoyed it, the mystery of Madame Caroline. I was totally shocked at the end, kidnapping, how awesome a plot twist.

Thanks, Baz! Wanna give it a go? ;o)

Good continuation, Wwb. The end felt a smidge rushed, but not so much as to detract. Well done! :D

Rushed? Hmmmm. The intent was to kind of "lull" and then, shock. Guess it didn't work...lol. I'll have to work on that aspect in the future. Thanks, JD...;o)

I think the end did 'lull' but the 'shock' part was a bit of a gush of wind. I think when you revise it, maybe work up to the shock a bit more and that will do it. Other than that, great next chapter. I loved the twist and the dialoge was superb!