Discussion of "Office Mates" by writerwannabe

My only quibble with this WWB is that in WBS's chapter, Sybil mentions that her plants talk to her. Our nerdy guy notes this and says that his plants talk to him, too. So I don't think he'd be that surprised.

But then, I read that this is a quickie and may not be held to regular consistency standards. ;-)

Those quickies, man... They'll get ya...

Dang it! You're right, of course....I really blew that one, huh? Thanks...now, I'm gonna be kicking myself all day long!

Nick and Nora are cute though, nice job despite the lapse in consistency;)

What can I say . . . I like it dangnabbit. ;-)

Cool writing friend. Love how you ended it. Quite a cliff hanger :)

Thanks, terelyn! Haven't seen you post anything for awhile...;o(

I hope our comments to your chapters haven't "turned you off" from writing. Truly, they were always meant to help.

How cute! I love the description of Todd, Sybil's kind way of dealing with Todd, and the plants' bizarre forthrightness. Too fun!!!

Talking plants. I realize there's a backstory I missed since I jumped in on this one, but I like it. Was pleasantly amused by this of course. Go honest plants go! As always, enjoy your work WWB.

That's amazing! I love the idea! Very interesting. The only issue I saw was that I felt this sentence wasn't complete. It feels like it just drags off, like there should be something else:

"Initially startled at the clothes the man was wearing, green plaid pants, an off white button collar, short sleeve shirt with a plastic pocket insert full of pens and pencils and a bow tie"

I don't know, I feel like there should be something more. Instead of putting the semi-colon you could've continued the sentence with that little part after. But that was the only thing that bothered me and the whole of the story definitely took me away!

I like this "quickie challenge" but I would love to read more of this story. It's well written and the characters come to life in the page or two they've been given to play on. Nice work.