Discussion of "After Murder - 2" by writerwannabe

An interesting twist. Well done, my friend, on both the first and this second chapter. A few passive sentences halted the flow a little. Other than that, well written. You always do very well getting into your character's minds and showing the reader their personalities. Again, well done. :D

Thanks, JD..;o). I thought I'd killed off all those pesky little passive sentences...lol.

Wow, didn't see that coming. Nice little diversive twist at the end. Looking forward to seeing what comes next. Maybe the baby can grow up, and knock that f*&&^% off in his sleep ! :P
Well done again :)

LOL..thanks, CS. Good possibility that the baby could grow up and seek revenge, but that would be for someone else to do...I'm done with this one..;o)

BTW - I've posted chapter six to your Once Bitten, Must Die story...hope you like and really hope you get back in to the mash!

Some times when I read your stories, I think it must be really worth wild to be a therapist in your home town. You know that guy's got to be making a killing!

LMAO....it's a she and yep, she's makin' a killin'...by now I've got her seeing a therapist..;o)

poor woman, but on the double edged sword side (never heard it put like that, but it fits) I bet she could write a great book! Boo for you! Haha

Great job, my friend. This is a stand-alone short story without any more mashing. But if it was me (which it ain't) I'd get rid of the last line and let us figure it out.

Thanks, al! I think you're right about that last line. If I could, I'd go back and take it out.

Wow, wasn't expecting that at all. Great job again! :)