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Discussion of "I Have 30 Days to Live: Day 3 (Part 1)" by writerwannabe


1 writerwannabe 3 years, 8 months ago Reply

I confess. Lots of grammatical errors. Normally, I proofread before I publish and get most of these kinds of errors but...I didn't this time. Damn.


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1 dogdeity11 3 years, 8 months ago Reply

good flow and additional charachter build. introducing the wife and kids. I liked the way you have him struggling internally...and the scene withthe milk. this poor guy.


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1 honeygloom 3 years, 8 months ago Reply

Agreed, I like the internal struggle and brining the family in more is obviously important to that struggle.


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1 Acee_Andrade 3 years, 8 months ago Reply

You proactively fixed my biggest concern about this story. You countered the last chapter well. You gave life to his family, and you typos did little to hamper your storytelling.


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1 theblackhand 3 years, 8 months ago Reply

Very well written, very good mash from the previous chapter. Him procrastinating to tell her was a very good leave.
The struggle he was having with trying to keep it together then having a hallucination right in front of his children...nice


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