Discussion of "Thou Shalt Not Kill - (4)" by writerwannabe

In case you missed the preview: I published this to the contest but was about an hour late. Since I'd really like comments and critique, I've posted the chapter here as a new story.
Thanks.

WWB --

Buy a watch and win a contest round. Curse your tardiness. Great stuff here.

-- Nash

writerwannabe:

Holy freaking hell, man! As someone who would really like to win a round of this contest, I'm soooo glad you didn't get this in on time, however as a fellow reader, I wish you had. This is amazing! Such gruesome and graphic descriptions. Everything flowed so well. I am sorry you didn't get to enter it into the contest!!! Keep the idea, revise it to make it even better (though I'm not sure that's possible) and reintroduce it in the next rounds. Good luck!
EA

Nash: LOL...yeah, really stupid of me. I haven't worn a watch in 30 years. Thanks for the comment.

Architect: Thanks, too, for the comments. Good luck in this round. I read your entry but I don't think I commented...I'll do so, now. If you're still in the hunt next round I'll see if I can give you some stiff competition...lol.

This is some real good stuff! I loved the details of Adara's "daydream"/vision. Well I hope you can compete in Round 5, unless I don't win Round 4! Haha!

WWB,

This would have won. Hands down. I have yet to read any others in this round that would come even close....including mine.

Adara's premonition...the foreseen murders...very good visuals. Why did you procrastinate on this entry?

Also, what is your entry for the HAC? Black Converse?

Thanks, blackhand. I don't know why I waited until the last minute to post...well, I do but now think it stupid...lol. Bottom line, I thought I had until midnight UTC which would have been between 7pm and 4pm in the USA. Actually, when I posted it hadn't closed but a few minutes later I checked and the contest had closed and my story wasn't there...oh well...next time. 'Course that means you and I will be competing again..lol. Liked your 4th chapter, too. Oh...yes, Black Converse is my entry and I'm working on a second story. What about you?

I am revising Phantom Limb to submit....I am also going to try to submit another story I am working on if time permits.
I may give up on Thou Shalt not Kill....not sure if I wanna continue at this point.
Good luck to you and I look forward to collaborating again sometime in the near future.