Discussion of "City Life, Country Home" by writerwannabe

I really like this - and I know just what you mean. My sister lives in a little town where they don't have to worry about their kids being out in the yard without an adult hovering every second.

I went from LA county to Rural Idaho. There's a big difference. I totally agree with your sentiments! I liked the way you used repetition of stanzas to emphasis your point. My piece "FRIENDS" is a poem too. I'd like it if you could take a look and tell me what ya think.

I enjoyed this wwb. Good to see you posting again.

Thankyou all, for the positive comments. I guess no one read the preview. Not hard to understand, I couldn't find it, either...lol. This really isn't a poem, it's song lyric (therefore the repetitive stanzas). I thought to get some opinions on the writing style/content without the music. This particular lyric combines my own childhood with the problems currently dominating cities of today. I've several more that I'll post and I appreciate your feedback.

I agree with your sentiments about the pushing and shoving. But as a lifelong resident of New York City though I feel there is so much good stuff going on too. Nonetheless if that's the way you feel you did a good job of conveying it.

Hi Peppz - I love New York City and agree that there are a lot of great things going on there. This song was written ten years ago and didn't correlate to any one particular city (in any country); rather, it was a conglomeration and generatlization of big cities worldwide. Thanks for your comments!!