Discussion of "Black Converse - Absolute Final Version - Part One" by writerwannabe

I like this version much better....

How would you like to add a chpt to my Suicide Watch story?

I will read the other chpt tonite....

I liked the suspence and the plot. I even got the heebee geebees myself. I didn't understand why you put the part about him stroking himself. It didn't progress the plot, and had nothing to do with what was going to happen. I would have liked it better without, but that is more a personal thing. Good read!!!