Discussion of "Door to Door Evangelist (6.2)" by writerwannabe

Awesome continuation man. I loved where you went with it, and Stuart is becoming the guy I wanted and thought he should be. The badass pissed off leader. Great job. Gave you a five.

Melanie was Sarah's mother and Rose was Henderson's wife. Also, David is a good cop, and a good cop, no matter how rattled he is, is not going to leave a suicide victem's body just lying in a public cemetary while he goes off to pray. I'm sorry WWB, I just couldn't get into that aspect of the story. And, creative though it was, I really don't think it was necessary. David could have brought Melanie to the morgue while Stuart went home to google (leaving the others to their prayers) and the disappearing burns and re-covered graves would have been more than enough to move the plot along.
I DO however, agree with Cheese about Stuart's development into a leader. It had to happen and you handled it with style!

Dang, I really screwed up who was who, huh? I should have written 'em down, but I thought I had it pretty well in my head.
I agree that David is a good cop, however, I think even a good cop would be very rattled about the cemetery scene and not so likely to perform...as usual and in the really, real reality....he'd have been on the radio and the place would have been inundated with cops and ambulances.

The story is intact though and really moved along. I like how Henderson bolted - would have done the same. Good job, again with a truly difficult storyline.

Epic!
Hey WWB…finished reading and voted you a 5 yesterday…however got sidetracked from my comment.
I thought this was really good. You obviously put a lot into it. I think it’s inherent that the attention span for most SM readers is relatively short. Sort of like a candy addict in a chocolate store…you just want to devour as much as possible as quickly as possible. I find that my longer chapters get read/voted on/commented on, much less than the shorter ones. However, I for one happen to love long chapters and I thought this was awesome.
I will agree with HG that the characters were mixed up and that was definitely distracting! (shame on you!) haha. But it’s a tough call on David…being a good cop is one thing, but being put in a situation where there is a Demon from Hell raising the dead out of their graves…I don’t know, hard to predict what anyone would really do. He’s got to be pretty distraught over the fact that the Captain is dead too…which I don’t believe has been touched on since it happened? And I don’t believe anyone has mentioned the mysterious item that the preacher removed from the safe in the Captains office when he killed him. I would think that holds some sort of key to this whole mess?
I really liked that you twisted it away from the religious angle and created the possibility of it just being a man with some incredible powers of persuasion...or something!
Aside from the flubbed character names, I loved it!

Thanks, dog! Yeah, the character f... up has been bothering ever since HG brought it to my attention. Well, hopefully, I'll live...lol.
I was trying to think of a way to bring in the mysterious package but, just couldn't come up with anything. And...I completely forgot about the Captain!! But, there are still three (I think) chapters to be written so I'm sure someone will catch, especially since we've mentioned it!

Good writing WWB. I saw the mistake as well as HG. We all make mistakes. Don't beat yourself up. I hope that the captains death and that mysterious package tha Dog left gets written in next. All in all this kicked ****!!

well, I'd think that David would also be a bit pre-occupied with the Doc's accident as well and with everything on his mind, a suicide victim could easily slip away...