Discussion of "Dark Secret 2" by writerwannabe

Continue it and post it already! LOL

I'm kind stuck...;o(

I know where I want to go with it, but don't know how to get there without a bunch of boring explanatory narrative.

Gimme a little time...;o)

okay, if ya need a little help, let me know!

;o)...thanks for the offer, dkk.

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Good so far. Might I suggest taking this to her doing some minor experimenting? You could take the "boring explanatory narrative" and turn it into your character's internal reflections and reactions to the results of her experiments and her referencing different passages in the books seeing why something worked or didn't work, etc. Dialogue is also a way to get beyond the explanations, granted it's borderline cheating. :) Could have one character explain some things to another and the other asking questions which are then answered, etc. From experience, it is good to break up this kind of dialogue with minor action.

Well, I hope my two cents help. :D

Absolutely, your two cents help..;o). Good advice and recommendations that I'm sure I can use. Thanks!

Hello Writer. Long time, no mash, huh?
I'm back and glad to be so. I can't wait to see what Jess is going to do next. I've always thought that women were the true harborers of evil. And being a woman, I can vouch for that most days, lol.
Carry on please!

Oh yes! I know where this is going. If your stuck perhaps we see Jessica become a bit perturbed by Sandy's stories of love with Craig. Maybe Jessica turns umm, "dark?" So many possibilities to really flush this out. Great idea! Man I am getting hooked. Does Jessica use the Secret to woo Craig under a dismayed Sandy's eye? ....

Greetings all...and thanks, very much for your support. I've been letting this stew a little too long, I guess...lol.

Well, with this august audience waiting, I oughta get the lead out..and I shall tomorrow! ;o)

wwb~ This is right where it should be. Excellent chapter to continue building the plot and character. You provided a clearer picture of what the dark secret is and as readers we can now begin to imagine how this gift might change Jessica and where this storyline might lead. Looking forward to seeing what you have in store next.

Thanks, dog! I'm sure you know already that it's going to get gruesome....lol.

What's up:) Totally loving this storyline. Lots of potential for wicked frolicking. Keep up the good work!

Hey, there, honey!!! Great to see you here again! I hope it's not just a brief visit...;o).

I plan on sticking around for a while:)

P.S. I tried Jessica's mantra on my sink full of dirty dishes yesterday... no luck, had to get my hands dirty;)

LOL...practice, practice, practice!!!

Kids can't keep secrets! This could get hilarious or very, very dark. Please, don't send the little guy to the cornfield! The Harley is a great plot-driving vehicle. Who's gonna buy it? Maybe somebody else who is also experimenting...and wishes for a hog between his legs.

You've been a writing machine lately, WW. Keep it up!

LOL...thanks, al! We know kids can't keep secrets...drat, I was hoping no one else would realize that. You let the cat out of the bag!!

Maybe Jessica will give that Harley to someone...hmmm?

Great chapter, wwb. Your pacing was spot on and you tied in what could have been boring information into the action/naration very well. Looking forward to the next one. :D