Discussion of "I Have 30 Days to Live: Day 3 (Part 2)" by writerwannabe

CAUTION: Part 2 contains some extreme violence and homosexual sex! I have no basis of experience...I simply wanted to shock and awe. This is really the first opportunity I've had to do that!!

Dude, where in the world did this come from?
No doubt about the shock and awe factor here WWB. Not just for the storyline but also coming from you. I actually feel soiled!
I found this extremely uncomfortable to read, which makes it all the more effective for me. I winced and I grimaced and I shook my head back and forth mouthing 'no...no...NO!’ I wanted to turn away but I couldn’t. And when I finally finished, I took a long deep breath, gargled some mouth wash, and gave you a big leather chaps wearing five.

Thanks, dog, not only for the 5 but mostly because you "hung" in there and I think saw the scene for what it was. I wanted to demonstrate how extreme character swings can be with a brain tumor. Of course, it depends on where the tumor is located, how big it is, etc. Assuming the worst place and the biggest size, these types of things are possible. It has often been suggested that deep within everyone lies an animal, an animal that has no morals, no ethics, no conscience. A brain tumor could release, even for only a short period, that animal.

Ouch! Brain tumors suck. But this helped me understand the mental instability of a man suffering from the inside out. Cringe-worthy, check. A good read, check.

My goodness, I'm speachless, or wordless, and um, I applaud you for your um... balls. Seriously, that was brave and horrible and I freakin' loved it. Like Eleven, I have to wonder where that came from. I'm shocked, but I guess that was the point. And though I know it is the completly wrong thing to say and I'll regret it as soon as I hit save:
"It was so soft, such a whimper that I wasn’t sure I was hearing him say that in between his moans of obvious pleasure."
But that, my friend, could only be written by someone who's never been **** in the **** before.

Such a strange and shocking addition. I admit it is well written, but like Dog and HG I have to wonder were this came from. This has never shown up in anything from you. Your penmanship is becoming more darker. Your willing to test limits most writers are scared to touch on. Reminds me of my "Gunther series as far as the graphic nature of unwanted and forbidden sex, also the violence added along with it.

LOL...you're right on with that comment "could never be written....". Thanks for the comments, HG. I was really worried that everyone would serious slam me on this part of the chapter and I'm relieved that, for the most part, everyone sees it for what I intended.

Thanks, blackhand. Maybe I've been reading too much of your stuff?!?...lmao.

Incredible. Love it. This is what I call "engaging the reader", I mean come on! I need to learn to suprise the reader a little bit more like this, you definitely have crafted something amazing here.

Thanks, mellsy..more than anything else I always to try to throw curveballs into the story...lol.

Two words -- Holy ****! No pun intended. Shock and awe indeed. Man, that was out there. You seriously don't run into this kind of stuff very often. Dark, messy, and frightening as hell, but ultimately, supremely written. The best writing makes you feel something unexpected, and I felt uncomfortable as hell WWB. Well done.

Thanks, Jackoalltrades...I'm surprised that anyone is still reading this..but, very glad you did!