Discussion of "Notes from a Shifter - 2" by writerwannabe

Whoa, the ending was awesome! Horray for 'down time'! LOL The whole thing was good, but I did notice once where you left out a word. "dragging (HER) body like meat...." Other than that, it was excellent. You kept the same POV and tone, the pacing was the same and everything! Cool. Totally not where I thought it might go, but it's you, and I expect nothing less! LOL

Thanks, dkk. Awww hell, I thought that left out word would sneak through without detection! lol.

Truth is, I thought you might be thinking about a second chapter and....well, I figured if I got one in quickly, you would go back to working on the Around the World project....:o)!!

That was really well-told. It's an interesting take on time-travelling.

Well, HEY! Look who's back....;o). Thanks, Cdn, where you been?

I agree with dkk, the ending was the least of what I expected. Not very many things are as horrifying as having to witness something you have no power to change. Great job on unfolding the already well-written story more. Anxious to read the next chapter :)

Thanks, CJ..;o). I always try to put the unexpected in my stories / chapters. Sometimes I succeed, sometimes not; but, it's always my primary goal.

I haven't a clue for a third chapter, perhaps you do? That'd be great!

After doing a little pondering, I would greatly enjoy adding a third chapter to an already great story :) If neither you or dkk mind, that is. My writing is a little rusty, but I'll try not to butcher it :)

go for it, I'm finishing up my part of the Around The World project so WWB won't have a heart attack! ;)

WWB is a happy puppy....;o)

Clever that little "rusty" bit, but that dog won't hunt around here, CJ...lol.

Hell yes, we'd love for you to mash this (I've already seen dkk's assent) can't wait!!!

All right, I did chapter 3 but left it as a draft to see what y'all think. Went with a bit slower pace. Tell me what you think.

Still trying to get fully over this block of actual storytelling. Hope I didn't butcher it :)

Wow, WWB. I think this is one of your best yet. The show and tell aspect was very well done here as was the pacing. You kept the tone of the character perfectly. Well done, my friend. Again, wow.

Thankee Sai, JD!! ;o)

writerwannabe, I thouroughly enjoyed this peice of writing. Having been enthralled with dkk's first chapter, this has just heightened my aniticpation. That ending was awesome, great concept. I can already see it going so much further, and in so many possible directions. Well done!!!

Thanks, creativesoul and welcome to SM...;o). I skimmed over your intro story yesterday, but didn't have time to comment. I'll do so soon!