Posted is a rough draft - about a half to three quarters complete for Robin's Rabbit-4.

Located here: http://storymash.com/u/writerwannabe/hipugohe/

Half to three-quarters rough draft. Appreciate comments

I'm looking forward to the next chapter...;o)

I discovered why I was having problems finishing up my novel. It was because I was trying to stick to the outline I had in my head and on paper. Now, I'm working each chapter "without a definite structure"...lol. Scary - no; fun - lots and lots!

WhoHoooo! Way to go, DJ. I will definitely "check it out"...;o)

Fabelhaft! Ditto al and JD and nash; yep, I think you left it in a perfect place.

Throughout this storyline, I've been thinking of the why's and wherefore's the Dad keeps coming back to life and how the son figures in to that. I can't recall anyone getting down to the essence of that. So...thanks, Nash...;o)

I have...it is!! ;o)

Is this the same story? LOL. Of course, it is and I know it'll become clear somewhere.. somehow...;o)

Several grammar errors, primarily misspelling but, not my bag...just a suggestion to give it another proofread.

Wow. You continue to amaze me with impeccable attention to detail, ever increasing tension and character building. As with your Renaissance story, I'm literally bouncing in my chair, wanting to read more!

I wanted to add: I think it really important for all of the writer's in this mash read and comment on their peers. Case in point (and there are several others): alharris posted a draft of his next chapter about a week ago. With one exception, no one has commented. He posted a draft to solicit comments and make his addition to that storyline better (not that it needs to be better). Please, everyone in the mash, read-comment-post your chapters and reap the rewards..;o)

Same here, Ace. I recall a beautiful series of stories similar to this, a year or so ago, that was HOT for the first 4 or 5 rounds and then...slowly died off. I'd hate to see that happen again. So, even though I was way late on my last chapter installment; I won't be again! Hope everyone joins me in that mindset...;o)

I dare say you have the male/female relationship thing down pat...lol.

I could recall my wife and I having a discussion just like this except that the roles would be reversed, more often than not...well, fifty/fifty...;o)

I'm telling you, the dialogue and the visuals you gave me were perfect - true to life - real; and, that's just the descriptive narrative and dialogue about the dog. The last sentence was off the map - a cliffhanger extraordinaire!