writerwannabe
Last Login: Oct. 11, 2008
829 Comments by writerwannabe
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writerwannabe 3 days, 20 hours ago
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Not bad?!? TBH? LOL...I thought it was pretty damned good. I love this, "She was dressed in all black, like she wore the night as her gown" and this, "Black wisps of shadow wove together, swiftly coalescing into a tall figure." And, I especially how things got a little humurous at the end. Very good!! |
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writerwannabe 3 days, 20 hours ago
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LOL...wow, great take on the Black Converse story. It was much scarier than what I'd written and excellently done, too! I loved it! |
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writerwannabe 3 days, 20 hours ago
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What a KLUTZ I am sometimes...huh? Geesh, all that rambling about "something" to tell us where the baby came from..lol. |
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writerwannabe 3 days, 20 hours ago
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I like the storyline. I love your writing style. But, there were some detractor's for me: |
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writerwannabe 5 days, 9 hours ago
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I noticed the style change and went back to the previous chapter to be sure I was still reading the same story, by the same person....lol. After that it was a great ride! I really enjoy your writing. It's quick and it's non-specific enough to allow the reader room to "write" his/her own details. You also have a great sense for things back to create greater mystery and desire to read more....wonderful! |
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writerwannabe 5 days, 14 hours ago
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Continued excellence. I sure hope you'll continue this storyline. I'm totally into it and want to know all of the mystery's you've so adeptly developed! Welcome to SM and I look forward to reading much more from you...;o) |
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writerwannabe 5 days, 15 hours ago
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Fabulous writing. I love your characters. Even with the eccentricies of the old lady's, you've brought them to life. I'll comment further after reading the next chapter...;o) |
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writerwannabe 1 week, 2 days ago
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Your joining the fray was a pleasant surprise, Nash. I anticipated Wolfram and I anticipated a climax. After "Torture" I, too, thought the next chapter should end it for the same reasons that you did. This was not a character driven story and the events had reached a point where I felt that another, non-conclusive chapter would be pointless. In fact, anything other than a conclusion would lesson the overall impact. I liked the pepper spray appearance and it's ultimate usage. I also liked how you spread out the action. It was close to being "too much" which would have distracted the realism, but you stopped short of that...;o). Great writing and conclusion, Nash! |
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writerwannabe 1 week, 3 days ago
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Now we're getting somewhere close to the title..lol. This one did drag a bit, very long conversation with Hank; but, it did establish both characters quite well. Continue? |
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writerwannabe 1 week, 3 days ago
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Very innocuous beginning for a title like this one...lol. Does the next chapter get deeper? We'll see....;o) |
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61 Chapters by writerwannabe
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3.8/5.0 - published Oct 01, 2008 - 3 comments (preview)
Part Two.. It's actually one complete story split in two because of word/space limits. You guys know the drill....lol. And finally, I screwed around with getting this thing formatted too long. It wasn't fun anymore. So, it's posted as is.
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3.9/5.0 - published Sep 30, 2008 - 3 comments (preview)
This is the final version that I submitted for the Horror Anthology Contest (Project). I've already received a rejection letter....not scary enough. I'll buy that.
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4.8/5.0 - published Sep 27, 2008 - 9 comments (preview)
Here's a song lyric for all of my Texas countrymen and women here on SM....;o)
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3.6/5.0 - published Sep 26, 2008 - 4 comments (preview)
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4.1/5.0 - published Sep 26, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Sep 11, 2008 - 7 comments - start of story
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3.7/5.0 - published Aug 22, 2008 - 6 comments (preview)
Probably an exercise in clarity that only I need, but I was bitten by a "good deed" bug this morning and thought I might relieve the itch this way!
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3.9/5.0 - published Aug 05, 2008 - 23 comments - start of story
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2.8/5.0 - published Aug 04, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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-- /5.0 - created on Aug 04, 2008 - no comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published Jul 30, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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This is one of my entries for the Anthology project. I've revised it and probably will again. Appreciate your comments. Thanks.
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4.6/5.0 - published Jul 29, 2008 - 9 comments (preview)
Well, I goofed and waited too long to publish this in the contest. So, here it is as a new story. I'd appreciate any and all comments/critique. Thanks.
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3.0/5.0 - published Jul 28, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Jul 24, 2008 - 6 comments
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3.6/5.0 - published Jul 21, 2008 - no comments - start of story
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4.0/5.0 - published Jul 15, 2008 - 11 comments - start of story
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2.6/5.0 - published Jul 14, 2008 - 9 comments - start of story
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-- /5.0 - created on Jul 14, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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3.4/5.0 - published Jun 24, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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3.7/5.0 - published Jun 23, 2008 - 8 comments (preview)
I wrote this story 25 years ago and thought I'd throw it out there. Naturally, this is only the first part of it and I stopped so that ya'll could mash the heck out of it.
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4.5/5.0 - published Jun 16, 2008 - 10 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Jun 10, 2008 - 12 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Jun 10, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published May 29, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published May 29, 2008 - 5 comments - start of story
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4.5/5.0 - published May 23, 2008 - 28 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published May 18, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.3/5.0 - published May 16, 2008 - 7 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published May 08, 2008 - 10 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published May 07, 2008 - 11 comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Apr 23, 2008 - 16 comments - start of story
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2.6/5.0 - published Jun 01, 2008 - 2 comments
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3.8/5.0 - published Apr 22, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.1/5.0 - published Apr 21, 2008 - 3 comments
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2.8/5.0 - published Apr 21, 2008 - 9 comments
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4.3/5.0 - published Apr 21, 2008 - 7 comments - start of story
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3.2/5.0 - published Apr 18, 2008 - no comments (preview)
I couldn't figure out how to get this final chapter read. It went in as a mash...on the contest pages (page 23 or something) and I figured no one would ever see it there. So, I posted it as a new story, too. If I done bad, I'm sorry...lol
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4.2/5.0 - published Apr 18, 2008 - 10 comments - start of story
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4.4/5.0 - published Apr 11, 2008 - 11 comments - start of story
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4.6/5.0 - published Apr 07, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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4.6/5.0 - published Apr 02, 2008 - 4 comments
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Mashing "A Scorned Woman" and "The Mark" has developed into its' own story. Here's the continuation of the two under a new name.
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4.2/5.0 - published Apr 02, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story (preview)
I think I have(successfully) brought the two stories "The Mark" and "A Scorned Woman" together to the extent that they have become a single story. Mashing "A Scorned Woman v" and "The Mark - iv, here is that "new" story.
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-- /5.0 - created on Apr 02, 2008 - no comments - start of story (preview)
I think I have(successfully) brought the two stories "The Mark" and "A Scorned Woman" together to an extent that they have become a single story. Mashing "A Scorned Woman v" and "The Mark - iv, here is that "new" story.
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4.0/5.0 - published Mar 30, 2008 - 5 comments
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3.6/5.0 - published Mar 30, 2008 - 3 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 20, 2008 - 1 comment
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 20, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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3.8/5.0 - published Mar 14, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 14, 2008 - no comments - start of story
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4.2/5.0 - published Mar 14, 2008 - 4 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 13, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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4.1/5.0 - published Mar 13, 2008 - 6 comments
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 13, 2008 - no comments - start of story (preview)
I'll apologize from the get go to those who were expecting a detailed and bloody murder plot...lol. Likewise, I hope you liked the twist and are now hanging on the edge to see how the murder will happen!!
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3.6/5.0 - published Mar 11, 2008 - 1 comment - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 11, 2008 - 8 comments - start of story
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3.9/5.0 - published Mar 07, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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3.0/5.0 - published Mar 06, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story
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3.6/5.0 - published Mar 06, 2008 - 2 comments - start of story (preview)
I kept the original story through paragraph five in order to set the stage for my version of chapter 2. Hope you'll enjoy.
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4.4/5.0 - published Mar 04, 2008 - 4 comments (preview)
Jesus appears unannounced in an old German cathedral and his message is not what anyone would have expected.
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