Not bad?!? TBH? LOL...I thought it was pretty damned good. I love this, "She was dressed in all black, like she wore the night as her gown" and this, "Black wisps of shadow wove together, swiftly coalescing into a tall figure." And, I especially how things got a little humurous at the end. Very good!!

LOL...wow, great take on the Black Converse story. It was much scarier than what I'd written and excellently done, too! I loved it!

What a KLUTZ I am sometimes...huh? Geesh, all that rambling about "something" to tell us where the baby came from..lol.
Never again will I comment on a first chapter without reading the second.
Loved it! Again, have to agree with HG; no need to explain the ending. Overall - excellent writing, great plot twist.

I like the storyline. I love your writing style. But, there were some detractor's for me:
Like HG, I'd have preferred less narrative lamenting and more background. I'd also like some clue as to how the baby ended up there. Maybe she passed a car coming down the wooded road on her way in? Something. I'm off to read chapter two. Overall, the writing is very good and the story intriguing...;o)

I noticed the style change and went back to the previous chapter to be sure I was still reading the same story, by the same person....lol. After that it was a great ride! I really enjoy your writing. It's quick and it's non-specific enough to allow the reader room to "write" his/her own details. You also have a great sense for things back to create greater mystery and desire to read more....wonderful!

Continued excellence. I sure hope you'll continue this storyline. I'm totally into it and want to know all of the mystery's you've so adeptly developed! Welcome to SM and I look forward to reading much more from you...;o)

Fabulous writing. I love your characters. Even with the eccentricies of the old lady's, you've brought them to life. I'll comment further after reading the next chapter...;o)

Your joining the fray was a pleasant surprise, Nash. I anticipated Wolfram and I anticipated a climax. After "Torture" I, too, thought the next chapter should end it for the same reasons that you did. This was not a character driven story and the events had reached a point where I felt that another, non-conclusive chapter would be pointless. In fact, anything other than a conclusion would lesson the overall impact. I liked the pepper spray appearance and it's ultimate usage. I also liked how you spread out the action. It was close to being "too much" which would have distracted the realism, but you stopped short of that...;o). Great writing and conclusion, Nash!

Now we're getting somewhere close to the title..lol. This one did drag a bit, very long conversation with Hank; but, it did establish both characters quite well. Continue?

Very innocuous beginning for a title like this one...lol. Does the next chapter get deeper? We'll see....;o)