Discussion of "6 - Red, Unscripted" by wolfram

Awesome start. I love Joe's personality and the way the narrator is evolving. Great chapter so far. I like it alot.

Thanks, Cheese. I should have the draft finished in the next couple of days. Hopefully.

Looking good. Looking good. Do you think that thre will be time for the Sherman-Macy complication that we discussed, or are you just gonna kind of make that a tiny side note? As for what I plan, either way will be fine.

If hoping for diamonds and rubies
When doing a play filled with newbies
The best/breast it gets
For theaters and sets
Is wallpaper-esque Busty Boobies

Favorite obscure line: “a water cooler with a 5 gallon jug that somehow had managed to get dusty on the inside.” Great way to capture Steve’s perspective.

Amazing – no script, no clue, and already it’s becoming a TV show. Heh.

Great job here Wolfy. I like how we've gone through 6 chapters with no author divulging anything about the script...Well except for parts that were taken out. Good stuff. Keeps the voice, the complications, and the exasperation quite well.

Wonderful piece. ^_^ I can't find anything to pick at without just being anal, LOL.

Did the piggy run? I hope he showes up later:) I love this, Wolf. You moved everything along, accounted for the fact that we have no idea what this play is about yet, and made up a new theater genre in the meantime. It's fantastic!
P.S. I love the side drama too with Macey and Sherman:) Very nice;)

Thanks for the comments! I hinted a bit towards the Macy/Sherman bit which really started in Chloe's chapter, I think, with her choosing the date-night outfit. Can't wait to see where that goes. (I know a little, but I won't tell.)

And the script? Um, yeah, it was really tough not revealing the details, because, um, I have it right here, yeah, and well, I'm generously leaving the big reveal of those details to the final authors. It's the least I could do.

Phew.

A standing ovation! What a riot- loved the descriptions of Red as "technicolor savior" the nudie cushions, the defunct fog machine! The theater verite' improv for the script (I think I took that same film class!) was classic- I loved the way you had Steve thinking on his feet and gradually winning over the actors and leaving a hanger at the end! Sorry this is late I haven't logged in in a while (2009 is not off to a very good start unfortunately) but can't wait to see where this leads!

Thanks, chloe!