Discussion of "Andy Williams And The Boy Of Company B: Chapter 3" by whisper55
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honeygloom 3 years, 4 months ago
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This is a good chapter, but really needs proofreading. You're not a bad writer and you owe it to yourself to take more time to clean up your writing. I like the direction you went and the way you described the scene. I think it was a good move making the nurse Andy's ally as well. |
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