I like the sudden twist in the story.
Vera

I like it. Thanks for the addition.

I'm not talking about vivid descriptions of violence. I mean stories family members (particularly the children) who try to get even with dope peddlers, (the ones thought to be hurting their families). I wrote 'Stop' about women who felt their husbands were hurting the family. 'Witness' deals with children who blame the drug dealers.

Is drug dealing considered an overdone topic? I'm trying to show both sides of the drug problem. Maybe it could solve the one in my own circle.

Thanks for reading.

Vera

I agree, I want to know what happens next. Good book potential.

It's a good fantasy cliff-hanger. I'm waiting to hear what happened to Brock.

It's a good fantasy cliff-hanger. I'm waiting to hear what happened to Brock.

When writing a horror story, Is it okay to let the imagine run free as long as the details aren't gory?

Veraelaine

I like the mystery of this story, especially the back story. I'm waiting to see what happens to Phillip.

The recipe sounded delicious until I realized what or who the main ingredient was. I'm waiting for the guests' reaction.

There were a few spelling problems, but I like the story. I can see that time travel could be unsettling. Keep writing.