Discussion of "After the Bell Rings" by tyzzler12

You made this sound so real I had to Google John C. Abba!

Thanks a lot, but this whole story came straight from my mind. I hope you voted, it means a lot.

Seriously, I thought you had plagiarized this text--the poem especially. Please know that I mean that as a compliment, too. Like honeygloom, I also googled parts of this text just to be sure. I think some parts of the chapter do get a bit distracted, so I as the reader lost track of what was going on or the message that you were trying to convey. However, there were also several moments of magic, with certain phrases that were absolutely profound and beautiful. Nice work.

Incredible work. I thought this might have been a true story, similar to a couple of mine. Outstanding use of vocabulary and absolutely unreal style. Outstanding, keep it up!