:) I hope you do continue the story. It is well written and gives a lighter side of teaching others that there is a dark side of thinking. Who knows the right person might read it someday and be able to use it somehow to redirect someone's thinking and change the world somehow. I know I will probably have more questions.

You are a monster, a killer of love :(

ROFL!!!!!!! This is the best story ever and soooo cleverly written. You have a great sense of humor!

Thank you for your input. I will look at the items you mentioned. The fire was suppose to be a reflect back and was suppose to tie in to why her relationship was failing and why she was having bad dreams and hearing voices. I probably need some advice on how to do this type of writing better. The story was suppose to have a bit of a melancholy feel because she was trading her young love for the every day life of moving forward with her young life but it wasn't suppose to be boring.

This would be such a cool invention. I see it as a time capsule of your life. You could have the seats lowering the fifty feet one scene at a time. The CRT would light up the blue walls to reveal a different memory of your life as you ride through the time capsule. Neat!! I hope you continue the story it will be interesting to find out what frightens you so about the images you are seeing.

This is a good start. I can't wait to read more. It would be so cool if you found your Sans Opera in shakerville afterall.

This is great. Suspensful and intriguing! Very enjoyable.

This is a good start. It will be interesting to follow what happens to the child and mother.

I like your story. I like the way you hint to an afterlife of a spirit in it.

Very suspensful I can't wait to read more!