Discussion of ""Mind Endurance"" by theblackhand

theblackhand....I finally got a chapter up for the Lucifer project. Also checked out your site. Very cool my friend!

Thanks dog

alwyas itriguing waht you write,, makes me want to continue it which i think i tried and miserably failed but. swell

Thanks HFW...I will finish this chapter asap.

Great writing ! Intriguing starter.

Great tension, BH! With no let-up in sight.

This is pretty damn intriguing. My kind of story, mysterious, reminds me of The Game a little bit, makes me want to read more now and that's the best compliment any reader can give. Hooked me in. Nicely done sir!

The title grabbed me but the story pulled me along. Very expertally constructed. Loved the pace and feel of it. You let a few ways someone could take this and at the same time, set some boundaries. Good job!

Great entry, TBH!

In particular the pacing was excellently done. You left me with lots and lots of questions..lol...very good!! And, let's not forget the gore at the end...classic TBH....;o)

Outstanding TBH. The ending was perfect (as mentioned before, classic TBH). It also let me wondering alot about it, but that's a good thing. Great pacing and feel. You gave good imagery (sp?) too.

Creepy and delightful. Another ‘tbh’ special. I will say that parts of it seemed slightly rushed though. Sometimes I feel like you have these amazing and creative ideas that you just cant wait to write down and share. However, you maybe don’t wind up spending as much time focused on the writing as you could. This chapter, I feel, is a good example. If you spent a handful of days working this over, and over and over, you could really mold it into a masterpiece chapter. Read it out loud. Picture the scene in your head. Pretend like you are an actor and you are reading a script for a play. Read the dialogue. Record it and listen to yourself. Does it sound real? Are these the things that people would really say? How will an audience react to it?
Just my personal opinions and I quite possibly could be insane so take it for what its worth my friend. You have a terrific creativity. Keep using it.

Thanks to everyone who has commented on my chapter here. It means alot.

dogdeity11, your absolutely right. I am guilty of rushing through alot my work. Can't help it. I want to write it down quickly. I want to give it to someone to read because I enjoy sharing my thoughts with people. I spend my whole life wondering what have I just done to a person who read my work. I don't focus on the 'fill ins' I want the immediate shock value.

I have just recently gotten work published that is a prime example. Not completely on purpose though. The original manuscript was 20,000 words long and counting. And at the time I still had two months before it was due. Guess what?
Lost all my work that I had on one of those "flash drives" (due to my dog, whom I still love) and my dumb **** didn't save it on my cpu. Lost alot of drive after that to finish my work. Worked on other things, other stories. But still finished it. 6,000 words now, but still finished. The finished work is short, concise, and can be read in a very short period of time. But it is fast paced, quick to the point, and damn good. And they love it.

Your advice, it couldn't be any better. If I took the time to caress my work instead of giving it a quick **** I know I could create better work. But my mind won't let me. It burns to fast. I have one idea after the other after the other after the other that I have to put them down or they will haunt me. What I post here is only a small fraction of what I have created. I am currently working on over 15 books (counting "Suicide Watch" which is the book mentioned by the way) and I will make sure I take my time on them...and your advice.
My style is to move a story fast paced. I don't want the reader to get bored with it. Thanks for the advice. I have always valued your opinion my cyber friend.

The site is called PublishAmerica.com. They are always looking for good writers who want to publish their work.

"I don't mean I will take my time on taking your advice dd11...

I will make sure I take your advice is what I mean."

As demented as always TBH. I wonder if I can match your style????

Good luck with your publishing endeavors...

Thanks WBScott...I bet you can match my style, its not much really.
Thanks also to you randomnickname...

Well, I gave it a shot check out the continuation...

I'm impressed...I could never write something like that!! Are you gonna write another chapter??!! You have really creative ideas and I loved the cliff hanger at the end!!