Discussion of "Gunther-Chapter 4, There is no GOD" by theblackhand

Hope you all enjoy......

Alright, so I read all 4 chapters as requested. Over all, I like the dry, understated tone the narrator has. It is very unemotional and clinical which is an interesting contrast to violence goining on. My only constructive criticism is that I'm still a little confused about Gunther's mental condition. It was his father who abused him not his mother and yet within the scope of the story he only vitimizes women. I would have expected someone more like Jeffrey Dahmer, or at least and indiscriminate killer I guess. Maybe the narrator could give us a little insight into Gunther's mind and explain either why he victimizes women specifically or if that's not the case let us know that too. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this series, thanks for the reading suggestion!

Chpt 8 of the Gunther series has been posted. Also read my Johnny Lame-O series please.....and Fatal Mistake if you haven't already.

The other day I said chpt 8 of the "Gunther" series....I meant chpt 5

Chapter 5 of Gunther has been posted. If you haven't read Johnny Lame-O and Fatal Mistake please read as well.

Great continuation. Maybe the best chapter so far. This guy is so brutal, vicious, and uncaring. The viciousness is depicted quite well I think. I can only hope sometime in the future someone tries to stop him...Perhaps i'll introduce someone myself. Anyways, I'll read the next draft of a chapter.

I like the flash back part you through in. Shows he's still reliving that nightmare even as he fashions nightmares for others. Great story so far.

Bad **** chapter man! This is what I’m talking about.
Details…details…
Excellent work!

This reminds me of one of the characters I created for the novel I am writing. Bad **** stuff...

If any of you would like to collaborate, there's plenty of room for all your blood thirsty maniacs! I love your work people!!! Please add some momentum to my slow moving tale. I'll try my best to collaborate with you all, I'm new, but I'll try my best, I can be surprising. Chapter 3: "Now I'm Here" of "After All"

"Here I Am Now" that's the title, don't laugh TheBlackhand, lol!! I'm half asleep now. Please collaborate, thank you all, I'm learning quite a bit from you guys.

Excellent Blackhand! Keep up the writing on this one. It's excellent how you intertwine the memory parts into what's happening in the present. Yes, Gunther was abused by his father, but I think I'm beginning to understand why he only abuses women. Keep it up man!

I went back and read the first two chapters and the fourth, as well and, though a fan of horror, the brutal, the horrific and love it when those things are fully described, there also has to be some descriptive linkage and a detailed character development to make the brutality something more than simply a string of words to elicit horror. I think 'Gunther' could be a great novel but not a short story.

Blackhand....I did, in fact, vote...a 3. I've gone back and voted you a 5. I, too, am not about the money here. In fact, I have gone on record (several times) stating that I am not interested in the contest. I will admit, however, that for the last 3 days my chapter Elephant Walk - 3 was bouncing between 2d and 3rd place. I did some experimenting to see how much of an effect a single vote had. I then, went back and voted those stories back to the original 5 I had given them. I assure you I am not playing any underhand games here, but someone is and that is the root of some major complaints that myself and several others have raised to the SM owners.

Another note: I see that you are now in 2d place. If you don't stay there it won't be because of me. It's absolutely mind boggling how one vote can make such a difference, isn't it. When I initially voted you a three, I wasn't even thinking about the contest. My changed vote was an offer of good faith since you were so convinced that I was responsible for underhanded ****. So....the underhanded **** is happening to me as I mentioned earlier. I wish you better luck.

Keep it mind I never accused you.....It was just funny about the coincidence. Anyway, I think you are a very talented writer, and I meant you no harm. It just came as an amazement to me that my writings have been recognized so swiftly and I have not even been with storymash for a month. It was very flattering to be recognized. I NEVER even hinted to the fact of you changing your vote on my story, so if you wish to go back and re-enter your original vote fine by me. I am not here to make any enemies. Please accept my apologies if I was wrong, and maybe we can work together in the near future.

There is a lot of underhanded stuff going on... but, it's all good, because the contest is designed to lure new people. Those of us that are here to write are here to write... sometime soon they will fix the system and then it will be worthwhile to think about contests... though it would be nice to have a little extra money, I have resigned the idea of winning... I just don't like the idea of someone maliciously cutting my work down for their own gains... it's total BS... In fact, I have one Chapter, the first Chapter of In a Nuts Hell that has maintained a 5 star rating since it was written... and it's not eligible for the contest, so that proves what I have been saying the whole time... anyway, I digress...

The more I read this series, the more I like it... and maybe, if you don't mind, I may throw a chapter in somewhere...I just need to read it a time or two more to get into the right mindset...

Thank you. Maybe we can work together soon....and I hope the system does get fixed so that real writers can be at the forefront versus some of these writers who publish utter bulls-t.

Well, I have a MASH started, Cry-baby Bridge, with an open invitation to all horror minded individuals to tag on and take it somewhere... as it is going, myself and Boltnut are churning it out, but would love to see others get on board if it interests you at all...

You can add if you wish. I think I will add to Cry-Baby Bridge.....Thanks for the invite.

I've already commented on this one but, I would like to revise. As in the first 3 chapters you seem to be "running" through. I love the story but it bothers me that you're not giving me more...more detail, more description and better grammar. I know you can do it.....show me. Show us all.

I've already commented on this one but, I would like to revise. As in the first 3 chapters you seem to be "running" through. I love the story but it bothers me that you're not giving me more...more detail, more description and better grammar. I know you can do it.....show me. Show us all.