Discussion of "Gunther-The 6th Chapter, "Hell Unleashed"" by theblackhand

I need ideas on where I could go from here. My intentions were/are to write 10 chapters. I do not want to disappoint anyone.....

It has a steady flow to it, yes, but it reminds me of a typical psychological profile concerning a serial killer, especially the projection onto his victims that they are his ''mothers'' as I understood it. This makes it a little cliche , it would be so much better if there was something ... that a horror-movie watching person did not anticipate.

Thanks for the comment....I am racking my brain for more ideas.

Hmm. Gunther is not my cup of blood, so I'm reluctant to comment. Evil father and fearful mother create soulless child. Something snaps within Gunther which sends him on a killing spree (currently at 13). Why?
He reads like Jason Voorhees - okay, I know he's going to gore people. When was the last time anyone cared? Even with your [limited] backstory, Gunther comes across one-dimensionally. I'm not saying give him second thoughts. But in your effort to make him primal, you've sacrificed anything I can latch on to. He's a murder machine. Kay.
Sidenote: have you ever seen the comic "Chopping Block"? Butch and Gunther have plenty in common. Google it.
Questions:
1. Why would the organization for the criminally insane let him out? Ever? Sure, they're scared of Gunther, but would they release him to the general public? Pronounced "cured"? Really?
2. Who's going to stop Gunther? A victim who escaped? The cops? Some other authority? Ghosts of his parents?
3. As odd a question as this may be, why does he kill? His brain is defective/deformed from the relentless abuse, but does he derive joy from his own acts? Vengeance? Glimpses inside his skull, as compared to reviews of the bloodshed, could prove beneficial.
4. Related to #2, how do you raise the stakes? You've successfully established your cannibalistic sadist misogynist. What can you do to evolve this more into a story and less as a character study?

Hopefully those questions can help you venture some new direction.

Your writing style is straightforward and simple, and that works for the story. I'd very much like it if you used your whole palette of colors instead of limiting yourself to red. Disgusting me isn't much of a challenge; fascinating me with a disgusting character? That takes skill.

In the interest of transparency, I voted for your story and I gave it a 3.

Thanks for commenting. The abuse from his father caused him to snap. Knowing that his mother knew and never did anything to help only fueled the fire. I ask, have you read all 6 chpts? And this world we live in (even thogh Gunther is fiction) lets people out everyday who were involved in henious act. Remember when he was admitted he was only 14 years old. 24 when he was let out. I haven't quite figured out yet as to who will stop Gunther. I am wrestling with ideas. Thanks for all comments.

Hey, nice work. I read all of Gunther. Your detail is brilliant. Keep up the good work and I look forward to future stories of yours.

I agree with Nash to some extent. You've defintely proven that you can gross us all out and you do it expertly. But what else is there to this story? Will anyone be able to change Gunther? Will we ever see another dimension to him? I'm looking forward to what you come up with:)

There is more to come....