Discussion of "“Phantom Limb....final revision" by theblackhand

I was thinking if you would like to get involved in a small project. It would be about a teacher and his/her reactions in every day of the week in terms of psychological games the teacher plays with themselves and others. I want to keep this down-to-earth this time. I thought I'd ask you this,since you're the only one here who really got me involved in anything. I also like your balanaced way of commenting and not playing some ''I won't comment on your stuff anymore'' games. Much appreciated - whatever your response,I'm fine with it.

Cheers.

I'm interested.

If you need to be discreet, my email address is mas0714@earthlink.net

Very well. I'll give you the details via email then. Wait some time,though, it'll take some time but will happen eventually. I don't think it's a problem...a couple of days.

Cheers.

blackhand, this is great. True horror, and thoroughly horrific! Very imaginative, good pacing, gruesome without being too descriptive, and boldly brutal and original.

Ok, I don't think there's the need for cloak n dagger. So here's how I see it : I want this to be a story about a different person's perspective every day. Meaning : person A is described on Monday, B Tuesday and so on. No connection between A and B. I will focus on their inner reactions and how does the outer environment perceive them/how it was supposed to perceive them . I want to include all kinds of archetypes,if you will, to support the thesis : mind has you, not the other way around. I would like some characters to be openly deranged according to the consensus, some covertly...also, to present the consensus and what it really is. I will start / you will continue or you can start / I will continue. Does it make sense ?

Cheers.

I'll post the first chapter soon so you can get the feel what I mean.

Excellent read I'm going to recommend this story to a friend of mine, btw thank you so much for your awesome comment it kinda made my day.

Deliciously creepy! I really like how you started at the end so the story can unravel. Great work!

I do believe gory horror is your forte, Blackhand. You write deliciously brutal scenes very well, with a decidedly grim tone. At times you seem to overdo the viciousness, but not in this story, it works very well.

I read one of the earlier versions and this completely escaped me. But the final scene reminds me of Dante and Virgil standing on the shore of the Archeron watching the opportunists flee the wasps and hornets before they cross into Hell. "Abandon all hope, Ye who enter here."

Which version did you read? The original version I posted on July the 1st I was looking to tell a broader story, add more chapters.
I got so much great feedback from it that I decided to alter it and submit this version for the HAC....
Continue on with the original if you wish....

Abandon all hope in fact was the premise for this edition.

I read the HAC version I think. I remember commenting and voting on it though.

Try the original....I think you will enjoy it.

I found the tone an interesting contrast to the scene. It seemed to me the speaker was almost monotoned, while the scene around him was totally out of control and manic. Interesting voice.