Discussion of "10: "I spoke with God"" by thamagnopen

I didn't see this as very compelling. Growing up religious I've heard a lot of prayers in my life and this one didn't sound much different than the rest. This is just my opinion, but fiction should make you think, make you question, or at the very least entertain you. While this was a nicely written prayer, it didn't grab me. I gave you a 3.

Thank you so much Honeygloom! I appreciate your comment.
Though I think any prayer that comes from a dieing man like the one in this story should get a 10 but this is just my opinion also, not to say I don't appreciate your 3.
Thanks and God Bless

It's funny, but I was hoping he wouldn't be a christian. As Americans crucifixes and apple pie are familiar. I was hoping his sickness would make him question more, and perhaps put him on a road less traveled or at leat written about.

Acee_Andrade from what i've read so far in this story I dont think he is a christian.. and if you read the chapter just before mine you know he has questioned, and he has took a road less traveled...
I simply thought from all the chapters written that I wanted to be the one who took him secretly on his own to a cathedral to speak to his maker, not because of his christianity but because of his pending dismissal of life.

I was looking for more of a heartfelt prayer--at least..even by human nature when something this huge and devasting hits..always ask why?? I think the prayer could have been more provoking.

abundantwater: I think throughout this story he has asked why quite a lot...
My idea for my chapter was to simply have him lay it out on the line between him and his maker in almost a conversative manner.

It wasn't meant to be heartfelt by anyone but him.
But please dont think I don't appreciate your comment cause I really do.
This was just my way to add my two cent to the great Blackhands Story line.

thamagnopen - I was initially not satisfied with your chapter, because as another commenter pointed out, fiction should make you think. As I read your chapter, all I could think was how it sounded just like any standard prayer.
However after reading some of your comments, I can now appreciate why you did what you did.
Someone in this circumstance, unless a dedicated Christian to being with, would no doubt question religion every minute of every day until the final day. That being said, I think you offered a piece of the character that was believable. With all the gay cowboy and satanic gambling dreams, the guy wanted to try and connect with something good.
Not the most creative or riveting chapter, I’m sure you would agree. I’ve read some of your other chapters so I know you’re capable of accomplishing those things. However, this was a decent and meaningful addition. I intend to write a chapter using some of your influence to guide his coming days.

Thanks Dog, and I would agree it was not the most riveting chapter, but I wanted him to slow it all down and perform some "Real Talk".
Thanks for your Comment I appreciate everyones input and I think you all are fantastic!

Thanks for your addition Thamagnopen (and what is the signifigance of your moniker? everytime I see it I wonder)
Although not as strong or compelling as I had wished, it does add something different to the storyline. Something heartfelt and realistic. God wants us to need him, and I think you added that here. I also would have liked to have seen more of a question as to why it was happening to him, with a more fierceness to it. God knows we get angry and question his motives, even though he does has the last say so in everything.
With that being said, I look forward to more work from you.

Thanks man, I appreciate your comment and agree with everything you, and the rest of the crew wrote. As I read along with each chapter I kept saying "please dont anybody write a simple Cathedral setting type Prayer" Because I wanted so to be the one to add this.
"Thanks and God Bless"

PS: About the Moniker? the Word Magno came from a fictional superhero from the DC Comics which I am a big fan. Thanks for asking(You probaly the first and last to ever ask.)(LOL)

Your narrative is very good! It's just that at the end, the line should have said, "In the name of the Father, the Son, and the Holy Spirit, in Jesus' name I pray, Amen."

Keep up the good work! This story is interesting!

Acuariana (Ondrea)

Thanks Acuariana for your comments, but I dont think he knew how to say it correctly, I do! but I dont think this guy in this story knew how.

I appreciate you for reading my Chapter, and hope you'll read more of my stuff.

A decent addition to the story line. I like the idea of having a"real talk" but as you said, if you don't think he is a Christian, why send him to a cathedral? I have to agree with whoever said this wasn't the most compelling chapter, but it was a good idea.

Also, is conversate an actual verb? I thought it was "converse." Just a little thing that made me look again.

Thamagnopen, that's fine. Thanks for letting me know, and I will try to read more of your stuff!