All Comments by thamagnopen

Thanks Ed it was Principal, and yes I have thought of bringing his office friend into the fold.

I Like it alot!!
Great dream sequence my friend.
The bible quotes are fantastic!

Wish we could go back at anytime and improve on the stories we write... seems like an easy thing to accomplish.

A Flashback you say? Humm

Thanks ed and yes you are right but I couldn't change it.

Very creative and well written!
I enjoyed it very much.

Very creative and well written!
I enjoyed it very much.

This was well done as usual my friend.
You have the gift of attention getting and we all hunger for that.

Great job!!!

This was utterly fantastic!!!!!!!!!!

Not a bad start to a story.
I liked the sherlock holmes bit and would like to see it continued.
Great Job.

Very good and well intend message.
Congrats on a great message.

I enjoyed the poem very much.
It had great feeling.
Congrats on a good job.

This was a fantastic read and also a bold piece.
Congrats

Fantastic and riveting read!
It kept me involved the whole way in the story.
Great Job my friend.

As Erotica goes I thought this was a very well told story coming from the horses mouth.
very good job.

This was a story that though quickly told has very good "meat" This is a perfect continuation story.

Congrats on a very good job.
you have a new fan.

Very well written! I found it deep and heartfelt.
Very nice job.

Thanks alharris I appreciate your perusal and advice, It was well taken my friend.

Thanks ww for your perusal I really appreciate it.

Thanks ww for your perusal I really appreciate it.

Thanks dkk4510 I have been away on a Music Production for awhile and it's nice to be back home, It's also very nice to be back on here with wonderful writers like yourself.
Thanks again for your perusal.

Thanks for your comments and all will be explained hopefully in coming chapters.

Writerwannabe thanks for your comment and I totally agree with you.

Thanks to all who perused the work, I appreciate everything said.

Thanks WW for your comments, I appreciate it.
In my mind those two were convinced they could return for more, and if someone was home they could play it off like they were the heroes.
They didn't know he knew it was them.
That's just the way my mind imagined it.

Thanks again and God Bless

beyza I liked your chapter a lot it was very creative.
I actually saw a clear picture of what you wrote.

COngrats on a good job!

PS. you might use a bigger font next time.

Twilight Calm was a very delightful piece.
You did a very good job with your wording.
You have a very creative and imaginitive mind.
"Dont Ever Change"

Wj I really liked your story, and I must say I thought there was gona be some grizzly happenings, but I was pleased with the great ending.
Good Job!

I was impressed with your chapter and intrigued by the story.
I tried not to assume anything and just read it for what it was but it was hard and that's a positive for you.

COngrats on a nice job.

Quite well put.. I could picture the story in my head very clearly.
Nice Job

I am in agreement with story-fiend whole heartedly this was an interesting and gut tugging story.
I was a little upset that she didn't do the human thing but I understood...

Good Job!

I've been gone awhile on a tour of sorts and I find it fantastic that I got to read your work right off the bat.
Very good work my new friend!
God Bless

That was a good read and quite funny.
Thanks!

This was quite intense.
I found myself very intrigued by the read.
This could go somewhere.
Great job!

I took my time and read this piece and really found it quite informative and meaningful.
Thanks for the write.

I liked the poem alot!
You have a talent for it.

This was quite Interesting looking forward to more...

I really liked Giselle's Journal and am looking forward to reading more.

Thanks for your perusal haihazan!
Theres more to come.

I am right there with Writerwannabe!
Good Luck and whatever you do be strong.

I want to welcome you also Word wise and let you know that your work is quite impressive.
I look forward to perusing more of your work in the future.

Everyone has pretty much said it all my friend!
Great Story but I enjoy most everything you write.
Keep it up.

Oliver Thanks for telling me why you write.
I thought it was fantastic.
Also Thanks for your perusal.

Thanks hebe!

Thanks Nash for telling why you write :)

Thanks for taking the time to peruse my work.
I will do the same for you.

Having found true love I can enjoy a piece like this.
Great job of writing down the meaning.

I liked, understood and felt the "Poem"
A very good job of painting a picture in words.

Interesting story! The gangster aspect was good and the storyline is promising.
Great start.

That was pretty cold leaving his pal behind like that lol but that sounds just like a young dude in that situation.
I liked the first chapter and will read on.
Great to read ya

Thanks, I really appreciate your perusal and very intelligent comments and ideas.
You have gained a fan!

God Bless

Thanks Brother It's good to hear from ya!
Stay well

Thanks for your perusal and comment.
I appreciate it and will do the same for you.

Thanks thinkaboutit! I appreciate your perusal and comment.
I will do the same for you.

Thanks a bunch for your perusal

Thanks alot for your comment, I appreciate it.

Thanks for your kind comment.
it will certainly be reciprocated.

Dog, I truly appreciate it.

I appreciate your comment and perusal.
Thanks a lot.
I will do the same for you.

I truly Appreciate the comment Dog,
Have a great year.

Very good Prologue what's next?

A short but moving work, That I thought was heartfelt.
I wish it was longer.

Good Job, and I'll be watching for more.

This was well written, I could picture every thing written very clearly.
"Vampirism and Love" That's always a great story.

Good Job!

This type of work is my favorite type Dog!
I was into this from the start and it kept me.
Fantastic work.

After taking my time and reading all three chapters I sat back and digested it all and thought to myself this could be a great novel!
Congrats on a fantastic read.

Very good poem! you do this very well.
I felt the passion.

I loved the sort of Angel of Death scenario you cleary wrote out for the reader.
I thought it was touching and heart felt.

Ireally liked and somewhat understood the poem.
I thought it had depth and true feeling.

I am a fan
Great Job

Thanks blackhand, and FYI I know a person who had that many personally, but the rest of the story is nothing more than fiction.
Thanks for your perusal.

Red you work is awesome and I detect you have some formal training in this respect?

Anyway fantastic work and I will be back over and over to read your work.
Happy New Year!

Dkk I truly enjoyed this piece because it was moving, funny, well scripted and imaginative.
I could actually see it all happening.

Thanks for a good read!

A piece I thought was deep, imaginitive and a good read.
It kept my attention as you went in and out of different situations.
Good Job

Nice writing! And well designed for thought"
I enjoyed the read, it gave me reason for pause.

This was a story I can tell you put a good manner of work into.
You have a few spelling errors (But know, that didn't distract me from the story.)

The story itself was a interestingly written story and I give you highpoints on writing it in this manner.

"Express what your mind tell you always"
"Keep Writing my friend"

Thanks I appreciate your perusal and I will be checking you out more as you go.
Keep up the creative side.

All I can say Is AMEN!
Good Job!

I read both chapters and enjoyed them both very much.

Good Job!

What ever do you mean Dean??
Otherwise I can't wait to read your work and thanks for your perusal.

Sammy Welcome to the community and thanks for your perusal.
It is quite appreciated.
PS.. It wasn't meant to be much there as far as writing was concerned my friend, but I think you knew that.
Thanks again

I appreciate that Blackhand, You know I sometimes just feel like a nut. LOL

3rdSunrise thanks for your all emcompassing answer(LOL) And you just may be right.
Thanks for your perusal.

Thanks but know it was just for laughs mostly.

I dig the site but what does it all mean?

Jake thanks for the 5

Sorry about the mis spelling LOL I meant replied of course!
Bye

Thanks Silver Its nice to meet you.
"Be reading you"

cnd140 forgive me for not getting back with you sooner but I have been a busy man for the last month or so.

I write on several sites to get an idea of what makes people react.
It is a release for me, I feel lighter in the mind after releasing my creative "chi" lol
It's great to meet you finally.
"Be reading ya"

Foo I'm sorry I haven't relied sooner but I have been incredibly busy the last few months working with a few artist on their material.
Nice to know there is other musicians in the community! What a cool story about the tour bus also but I doubt I ever seen that bus.LOL
We were with her right off of STAR Search, and then she was gone to the stars.
Anyway it's great to know you and I will look for your work.

I enjoyed the story, and it reminds me of a movie I seen a long while back.
Good Job and hope to see more.

This is one story that intrigued me. Hope to see more.
Good Job

I enjoyed the creative picture you painted, and I enjoyed the story very much.

Welcome Nickg to the storymash Community!
There was quite a few mistakes in your piece of work, and a few mispellings but the fact that you wrote it and you attempted to paint a magical picture I commend you.
Don't stop writing, don't stop being creative.

This piece had a few mistakes, but I was able to see right through them and enjoy the piece anyway.

Good Job

Your piece was enjoyable funny and very descriptive!
This is one I could probaly continue with ease.
Good Start!

I thought this short piece deep and provocative.
Good Job with painting a clear picture.

I enjoyed the story and though it has imperfections I read right through them because of the interest in the story itself.

Good Job!

Question- Do you write many chapters from a piece like this, or do you just go on to another?

Just another thing that This site doesn't have that it should have.
I promise my next chapter will say {turned}
Thanks "Eyes"

I appreciate your comments JD and I will do that.

Elleiner thanks for your suggestion and I appreciate your perusal.
But at times readers don't read pass the first chapter so I put each chapter up so that it will at least get a chance of being perused by interested eyes. I will also present it as next chapter also.

Thanks again and I will be reading your work also.

dkk4510 thank you for your perusal and I understand what you are saying, but please understand also that I am a professional Songwriter that is trying my hand at writing short stories, and all I have to use is the correction thing on word.
I love this site because there are people like you who will help in bettering my style.

Thanks again

I thank you both for your perusals and yes there will be a chapter 4.

A very interesting story, and may I say I enjoyed it very much.
I hope to read more of your work as it is posted.

Thanks thinkaboutit I appreciate your perusal.
I will do the same for you.

Cleaver Poetic piece! I enjoy rare pieces like this just because they are different.
Not for a lot of people but some like me enjoy it.

Good Work

A Gay story yes, but a well wrote story.
When I read stories like this I feel somewhat
confused at what two men, gay or not could see in one another, but thats why we call this planet
"Earth"

This story may be commented on by few but I feel it will be enjoyed by many!
I liked it from beginning to end.
I will return for more.
Fine Job

This story has fantastic potential. I enjoyed the clear picture of what you were writing.
Great job and I will be back for more.

I really appreciate you perusing my work and know that I will be doing the same for you.

Thank you I appreciate that very much.
I only use word spellchecker and whatever else it does and I guess sometimes thats not good enough.
Again thanks for perusing my work.

A very good read Persephonie Looking forward to what you do futher with this.
Good Job!

I liked the poetry and liked how you worded it very much!

Nice Job

It is so nice to hear from you again Persephonie!
Where you been?
I have been missing your work, and believe me I been searching for it.

As for my writing I don't know about any contest, I surely haven't signed up for one, and until someone tells me that I can't write a chapter about what I am feeling at the time, thats exactly what I am going to do.
Please don't mistake what I am saying as hostile or anything I just don't want you or anyone else trying to tell me where to write my work.
You are a good writer but your not that good to try to tell someone where to write Okay?
I have a lot of respect for you and your work but please chill on the bossiness, I don't take that well.
This is a forum for writing, creating and exploring, which is what I was doing when I wrote what I wrote.
I wrote a little thing a while back about people like you on this site, and I still say that folks need to realize that we all are nothing more that beginners at this writing thing and we need to stop trying to be more than that.And when I said Black Man I meant "Black Man" Persephonie I didn't think it nessasary to say "Obama." Anywho I don't mean to seem upset because I am not, I am sort of giggling because you prove my point about snobby people on this site that think they are all that and they really are no better than the rest.
Take a good look in the mirror...

Oh I hope to read some more of your wonderful stories!
God Bless you and yours

Amen Chloe! Amen...

Thanks hebe6405 I appreciate that.

hebe I finally got to read your continuation and might I say well done!!!!

Thanks for your kind comments!

It was written for the purpose of a short story, and I am writing more into this story for later.
Thanks for taking the time to read.
I appreciate it.

Thanks for your perusal!!!
I appreciate it.

A story that seems quite real.
And might I say very well told.

The cockroaches part tickled me to no end, and the rest of the story was a good read also.

This story was very short but very interesting though. I hope to see more.
Good Job catching my attention.

I saw the few mistakes also but I got to tell ya man, I liked the story alot!
You have a great way of capturing a persons attention.
Great job and I hope to see more.

jd thanks and I will.

shadinah thanks for your comments and taking the time to peruse the story.

Thank you AnneB I appreciate your perusal.
I will do the same for you.

Thanks theblackhand for taking the time to peruse.
And I agree with your comment.
I am working more on it.

I thought that was awesome Man! and I am sorry I hadn't told you sooner.

Thank you for your perusal.
And thanks for your comment.

The plot has thickened and I'll tell ya Hoov, I wish this had gone a bit longer it stopped so suddenly that I cursed out loud!
Gret job!

Hoov great job! you are in my fav writing spot.
I am a science fiction nerd, and anything space grabs me and wont let me go!

I will stay with this one buddy!

Thank you Dwaynehoover for taking the time to read it. I really appreciate you doing that.

No I have never seen that show but I heard of it.

Your story description is awesome! and the story it self was a very good one!
Is this going to go on?

I really liked the story! I was very descriptive and it kept me reading till the end.
Great Job Young man!

I simply believe that the government already knows how to divert hurricanes and other natural disasters but would never employ them.
As they wouldn't bring about cures for anything.
It just wouldn't be prudent.
Thanks for your comments guys...

Good reality, but a very sad story.
Write on!

Go for it my friend! and Thanks I like the ideas. One of your ideas I had already planned to go with, but I won't say which. chapter 3 is gona be a lulu

Thanks man, I was feeling lighthearted and decided to write something just for laughs.
Thanks for taking the time.

Yes Sy, The fact that you took the time to read something that was just for laughs LOL
Thanks I appreciate it!

Thanks guys! I could not agree more and will do more work on this.
This is why I have requested being able to take a story off, and re-do it just to see if the others who commented felt like I did a good job changing it.

Hello all! I am a 12 Instrument Musician, Song Writer/Producer, and Publisher from Dallas, Texas.
I am owner/CEO of Three Companies(Blank Image Productions,Image Maker Management, and Constitution Express Publishing) I have six Grown Children, and the last of them is a junior in college.
I write Song Beds ffor several Radio Stations in Texas and I am the Voice of another That broadcast in over 177 countries over the Internet.(Kick Radio)
I am an accomplished Vocalist that has opened for some of the biggest names in the world of music, and my first success came with the Gapp Band,One-way, Roger Troutman/Zapp,Midnight Star and Regina Belle.
I was part of the first Band that every played behind Le' ann Rimes when she was just a child, She practiced in my Garage.
Right now I am busy writing scores for two independant movies that are due out next year.
(Enough said about me)

I would like to thank the people who came up with this on the storymash team, I think this is a fantastic get to know each other platform.

As usual I was totally into the story Hoov, Great job! and the song you sent I also approve of! Vocally(????) But I listen to the song as a whole music and lyrics, and I like it alot!
Great job there also.

Thanks for the read Beautiful.

Okay I'll check it, Thanks

Very well written my friend!

I appreciate ya Friend, Thanks

Thanks!your a good "Egg"

I read this story from beginning to end and though at times I thought it may have been a little too much "explanation" going on, still I thought you did it with excellent smarts! It had imagination,and incredible description!
The creatures you made believable, and the gore was like I like it! I am a horror story buff and I am enjoying your work very much.
Great job my friend!

Thanks, but what does that mean? I mean" really"

thanks jordaec and it's going to get sadder.

Amen my Friend! Thanks

These were great suggestions and the part about feeling like a teacher was brilliant!
Thanks for adding your comments and suggestions.

Very smartly written and I am liking what you do more and more.

Fantastic start! The realism of the story jumps out at you.
I am glad you are here my friend and look forward to reading your work and hopefully you reading mine.
Welcome.

Very good suggestions Thanks!

Thanks Whisper55!

I too thought this was an enjoyable story!
A very good read.

This piece was very well put, and very well descripted.

Gave you a 4!

I read this story with my eyebrows down the whole way.
Great job describing the story and making me feel what you are writing about.

I'm glad you're here!

I really got some laughs and some memories from this story!

Great Job!

A very descriptive,moving story that kept me wanting to read more...

Thanks for your comment.

very nice man! Enough said..

Fantastic! Thanks Man.

I hope the team don't mind me reposting this but it is the only way to get everyones opinions on this situation.

If there is another way to do this someone please let me know.

very good suggestion hoov! Thanks

Thank you Katrina for your ear..

You welcome my friend, and I am glad you are back.

Thanks for commenting my friend, the word is out and I believe the team hears us.

Maybe, Maybe not. I'll let you opt to think what you like.
Thanks for taking the time to read it.

God Bless

Thanks Intrigue, all we have to do is bring it up and maybe something will be done.
At least I hope so, cause I am really digging this site.

I read them all and enjoyed them all!
Great!

Brilliant! My Friend, I enjoyed it very much.

Hoov I like what you did with this!
And my answer is simply NO!

I know, and have studied most of those in my life hoov. You are certainly "Da Man"

Dugg the Short Ralf hope to read more of your writing. Welcome!

Welcome to the Mash firstly! and I read your short and it has legs, Do you intend to do more to it, or just throwing it out there?

I am right there with ya! We have to not let this vote be about color, and make it about what we know...

Thanks Blackhand, and I am glad to know ya with it!

Thanks and I am just glad it reminded you.

That makes good sense and thanks!

Thanks and juju is mojo.

I thought the story had "Intrigue" I felt a little sorry for the lady.
Great job!

I still reading and it still got me.
Come on!

LOL tell me about it!

Dang good true story!

I like it!

Thats both hilarious and scary man!
But a lesson for all that reads this.

I understand, and the story will be there when ever you get the time.
I appreciate you saying that my Friend.

You sound like a pro! well written, very informative.
Welcome to the site.

He didn't say he was sure he was six-five he said about, which means he was guessing.
Thanks for your perusal, and I understood the part of not liking the screen formatting of centering the paragraphs. Some people don't like that.
I do appreciate your comments and hope you will read more because I will be reading you.

God Bless

Thanks and know that you are welcome to go anyway you choose, thats what Story mash is all about.
It is the greatest form of flattery to be Mashed.

Thanks for the perusal.

I appreciate the perusal, Thanks

Thanks whisper55 I will do the same with yours.

I thinking about it? What do you think?

Wow! Very nice.

I am digging your work and welcome!

Very well said! and very well written!
Great job.

I enjoyed the story so far and welcome!
I'll be reading at ya!

I liked this start, It was quite descriptive. I hope you continue it.
Nice job!

Great start! you should continue this, I have a feeling it would get rave reviews.
Welcome!

I appreciate your comment
Thanks and God Bless

Then you know the hell they cause...
Thanks for commenting my Friend.

Thanks Molly, I as a child grew up in wichita falls Texas and we lost five homes to twisters before my dad got smart and like the beverly hillbillies, move away from there.LOL
Thanks for your comment.

Nice start Broke! Keep it coming, I think this could be a good one.

Bravo My Friend!

Thanks so much for your comment turtle-lady, and I look forward to reading your work.
God Bless

Great! Now i am caught up, and "caught up" in your story. Well done!

I liked this part very much, I must go back to chapter 1.

Great job

I liked the story, and agree that it can go quite a few ways...

That was great!

All I can say Is WOW! Very well put my Friend.

Thanks hoov!thats just what I was getting at.
Appreciate the comment

Thanks Man, I hope everyone will at least use their writing skills to say something important.
I appreciate your comment.

I read the story and enjoyed the story.
I am impressed with your imagination.

Great job!

I too enjoyed the story!
I encourage more...

I got it and was pleasantly surprised Hoov!
Are you signing? are you playing? what the deal?
Just email me back at my Email so we dont clutter up the SM with stuff thats probaly non important to anyone but us.
I you are ever interested in hearing what I do for a living go to www.blankimagepro.com
Great song!!

well said, and it seems to be "real talk"

I want you back as soon as possible my friend.

I liked the story and the detail.
good job my friend and welcome!

Thanks Theblackhand and I hope you dont really have writers block, and if you do, I pray you get back soon.

My Email is thaproduca@sbcglobal.net
I will be looking for it!
Thanks Hoov.

Where can I hear the song?

A feel good story that seems to make ya smile at the end and wanna say Bravo! Manny Bravo!

I liked the story but didn't see the end coming, sort of took me by surprise.
Nice job.

I read it and I liked it!
Good Job my Friend.

"What a hard luck story"
well written and it kinda made ya giggle....

I love poems or writings like this! this is what I read most when I read,LOL there is 4 or 5 mis-spellings but they didn't take away from it at all.
I really liked it!
Great job.

LOL Hoover! your math skillz are on the blink Dude!

The story said that he was giving one guy fifty thousand dollars and that guy was going to share twenty-five of the fifty with his partner, and we all know that twenty-five plus twenty-five is fifty! LOL

And it's a bad deal for the guy in the coma,
Thanks for saying something, and I forgive your math cause you are a good person.

I think you have a great story working here!
Keep up the good work.

Thanks Hoover, I appreciate it.

Well said Nash, Well said.....
Now everyone that writes knows what to expect from you.

"Much Respect"

Very good continuation! Thanks for taking the time to do so.

The comedic value of this piece is priceless!!
I enjoyed it very much.
"I will return"

I liked this! and wonder why noone commented on this one? I think I'd like to Mash this one.

Short but sweet hate I missed this.

HA HA HA HA HA HA!!!! Loved it!!!

Sorry that was describe her.... ("BAD Finger")

I knew Kirsten when I was in high school.
Love the way you descibe her.....

Very well written! I could see what was happening like a movie..

I enjoying it so far....

Honeygloom well said! Thanks for that wonderful explanation of what you were looking for!
I have never heard of Past Perfect, and I will look into that I promise, because I am one who want to be better.

Thanks again, I am proud to call you friend.

Honeygloom, your comments excite me! and I appreciate the fact that people like yourself gave your input also. Sites such as this are special to me. And when something that has clearly been on the minds of many isn't said I felt it was time to say it.

I loved your examples, like the trumpet player, cause thats one of the instruments I mastered in.
And if someone told me that they "didn't want to learn music" and that they just wanted to blow, I'd get far away but I would respect that. (LOL)

Question: Is this site suppose to be a fun site or a College Course for aspiring Authors?
honeygloom, some people "just wanna blow" They care not about being an accomplished Published Author "Okay?" Let them have fun too.

Question: Are people that don't have the knowledge to write correctly in your opinion haters of the English language?... I think we all love the English Language, some just, on this site don't feel like they got to be right in every way to have fun writing a story.
Remember... This isn't College or a Authoring Class.

You said you don't read stories with grammer or spelling errors, Well honeygloom, I do because I don't have Got-to-be-right-uss (I made that up.. (LOL) but it fits.

You guys and girls need to relax, don't be so uptight about things that aren't that serious.

Oh" and honeygloom, I wrote "Good ole boys and girls network" for nothing more but to see which ones would come out and say or think to themselves "He's talking bout me" I didn't have to call out anyone, and I didn't mean to call out anyone. I just wanted to call out the situation to the masses, and hope that it would change if only a bit the mind set of some, on this great site.

Question: Can you name the Published,Professional,
Books on the shelf Authors who are part of this site?
My point is (in my opinion) there are very few people on this site that are professionals.
We're just a lot of amateurs with some, that think a little too much of themselves, and if that somehow gives them strength then (God Bless Them)

"Some people need to be right, and others just need to be"

In closing, please don't think of me as a trouble maker or anything like that. I am totally on the side of the site, I have my favs too, Theblackhand, persephonie, Dog, yourself, and I could name ten more, which I guess puts me in some sort of network too. (LOL) I just hope we don't run away the folks that just want to write... Thats all!!!

IF THIS IS A CLASS LETS GET RID OF ALL THE FOLKS THAT DON'T RESPECT THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE!!!(LOL) "I'M KIDDING"

God Bless you and thanks for such a great heart felt Comment.

Thanks Persephonie, for your constructive criticism!
Lets go through it shall we?
You say in your opinion I should stay in the present or work backwards( I chose to write it the way I did because thats the way I felt it should go... It's called my writing style)

After I finished I did read it as I have every one of the stories I have written and it did make sense.(To me)

Because you didn't feel vested in the character doesn't mean thousands of others wont be(But I respect your opinion)

IF they way he killed seemed tame to you(I'm scared of you!)LOL I dont think it could have been any meatier.(My Opinion)

You said you don't feel like he was worried about the "threat" well I dont think he was overly worried, other than the fact that he a druggie that killed for drugs, other than a sycho that just killed for kicks. who do you think would be more worried? HUmmmmmm

You see" I hope I helped you to understand that since we both are just amateurs thats means we both just have opinions.

Neither of us knows what the hell we are talking about, I just admit it.

Love ya kidd Thanks!
PS: this kinda stuff is right up my alley.
And it proves a great point to all the newbies that come aboard.

Thanks HuntsFamousWolf for the comment!
And about "write about something you know"
IS fiction something anybody Knows????????
Every story I have written on this site is fiction and I don't know a damn thing about any of them(LOL) What are you talking about!
That didn't make much sense "Sorry"
But thanks! for the first of the comment.

Uppity or not Nash, I dig what ya saying!
And the fact that ya said it means evrything.

Thanks With lots of respect.

Great job! give me more!!

very interesting read my friend!

I really enjoyed the read!

"A good read my friend"

You have a good imagination Keep it up!

Appreciate the comment!

Thank you Berlingirl!

Thanks alot theblackhand! That means alot.

I read right through it! (LOL)
Thanks for the laugh.

God Bless

Thanks Silver! very well said. And I am glad you brought up the Genre thing, Thats why I wrote this,just to get more folks talking about a site that we all seem to love.

Powerfulpen "That all I'm Saying"

One of the most moving comments yet! Thanks

Thanks, I appreciate your comment, and I think we will all get something out of this in someway.

I agree that all comments don't need to be encouraging, but they can at least be kind...
Note: Some writers on this site can't spell, but they wanna write, Some writers on this site don't know punctuation,Grammer, Structure, etc... and nothing we are gona say to them constructive is gona teach them how, but they wanna write.
So I take the story for what it is, and casually mention the mistakes.
But Persephonie I agree with how you expressed your opinion.

Thanks and God Bless

Thanks Persephonie for your comment and for your opinion. "well taken"

Dog, I couldn't have said it more eloquently.
I appreciate your reasoning, and thank you for giving others who read this more to think about.

Because again, I wrote what I wrote "Not to be right, but to be heard"

dog, sometimes when your writing a short story you simply don't take the nessasary time to see all the plot lines, and I am guilty of that.

Thanks for your comment, I really appreciate it.

Powerfulpen, Great comment! Thanks, that really helps a guy like me to hone my skills.

Welcome to Mash eulalie 2286! What a great start for a first attempt! I see some great writing coming from that mind of yours.

I don't know if you'll get to everything but like me I know you are gona find some great writing that just pass you by while trying to "keep up with the gang"

I appreciate you saying that icanziiravor, and hope you find some stories that make my comment mean something to all the just out the closet writers who just wanna be heard.

Thanks again my friend.

Blackhand, it's guys like you who I think are leaders and voices of reason on sites like this.
If someone like you is willing to, when time allows read a new Author I think that makes a great statement for all.

Thank you for your comment, I really appreciate a guy like yourself saying what you said.
"Be well my friend"

quetzacoatl thanks for your comment. You are one that I quite enjoy reading everytime I log on.
But before I get to the meat, I often search for the veggies first, just to get a taste of the other food group.

Thanks for your comment and your writing.

Berlingirl Thanks! I just want your opinion to be just as important as the next persons. Also your writings to just be given a chance.

I enjoy great reads, and I also enjoy the person who simply tries.

Thanks and God Bless

I appreciate you commenting DwayneHoover, It feels great to hear what the community is thinking and feeling. I'll be reading ya!!

Thanks Jakestar for your comment, and note, I didn't write this to be right, I wrote it to be heard, because I really love this site.

Liked the story! Was a good read....

I like what your doing, and will be checking in from time to time.

Interesting, Could that priest have done something wrong in this man past?
It's worth reading more.....

Good Read and should be continued.....

A very good read Katly! Maybe we can work on each others stories! Check out the "Inexperienced Dick"
"if you haven't already"

Great Job!!!

A very good read!!

Being of kind, in a way, I digg your rambling also.
Good Job!

I can tell someone knows good when they see good!
You two would have been my picks also.
"Congrats Yall" (Straight from a Texan) LOL

Thanks Acuariana for your comments, but I dont think he knew how to say it correctly, I do! but I dont think this guy in this story knew how.

I appreciate you for reading my Chapter, and hope you'll read more of my stuff.

I thought it was creative.... Keep it up!

Nice! I digg stories like this! I spend my evening on here searching for good stories like the start of this one.
Good Job Good Start!

Thanks Persephonie for your comment!
It's awful nice to have put a face with the writer, and such a Talented writer.

Thanks man, I appreciate your comment and agree with everything you, and the rest of the crew wrote. As I read along with each chapter I kept saying "please dont anybody write a simple Cathedral setting type Prayer" Because I wanted so to be the one to add this.
"Thanks and God Bless"

PS: About the Moniker? the Word Magno came from a fictional superhero from the DC Comics which I am a big fan. Thanks for asking(You probaly the first and last to ever ask.)(LOL)

It is very nice to have such prestige in our midst.
SM is now Certified in my mind.

Welcome!

Keep sharing my friend, your thoughts a very creative and decisive.
I like you style of writing.

Though I agree with the other commenters about this first work, I liked it!
Welcome to the madness of SM and keep it up.
I'll be looking for ya.

Thanks Dog, and I would agree it was not the most riveting chapter, but I wanted him to slow it all down and perform some "Real Talk".
Thanks for your Comment I appreciate everyones input and I think you all are fantastic!

Very interesting story! This guy seems gross as hell!

Interesting start.......

abundantwater: I think throughout this story he has asked why quite a lot...
My idea for my chapter was to simply have him lay it out on the line between him and his maker in almost a conversative manner.

It wasn't meant to be heartfelt by anyone but him.
But please dont think I don't appreciate your comment cause I really do.
This was just my way to add my two cent to the great Blackhands Story line.

Acee_Andrade from what i've read so far in this story I dont think he is a christian.. and if you read the chapter just before mine you know he has questioned, and he has took a road less traveled...
I simply thought from all the chapters written that I wanted to be the one who took him secretly on his own to a cathedral to speak to his maker, not because of his christianity but because of his pending dismissal of life.

Whaaaaaaaaaaa?????????????

Gruesome but I like it!!!!!

I am intrigued and like where you are going with this story......

I really liked the story alot! I likened it to a story I wrote called "A monster in my dreams"
I really dig stories like this!
Great job Persephonie!
I gave you a 5

I thought this was a feel good story, and it made me smile.
Well Written!

Thank you so much Honeygloom! I appreciate your comment.
Though I think any prayer that comes from a dieing man like the one in this story should get a 10 but this is just my opinion also, not to say I don't appreciate your 3.
Thanks and God Bless

Thanks Jackoalltrades for your comment.
Explain what you mean by generalities being PC if you would, I am always trying to pick someones brain on how to be better.
I started this story to see if I could get others to write what they wished in the future was fixed for the better. Hopefully someone else will dare to dream.

I read you and I like it.....

Viniyo" WOW!

I felt the story, congrats!

I meant now I wanna know what happened next.
"sorry" I type too fast for my own good.(LOL)

Know I wanna know what happened next?.....
I like the story and believe it has legs!

I too am intrigued... I love a good story!

I truly like your writing style!
and great Name!

I'm looking forward to the next chapter! "Poor Guy"

This has yummy potential! I can see many ways that this little plot could go..
I'm digging it!

Good Start, I am interested why this is going to be her last day....

Bring it on!

Blackhand am I still chapter ten?

My experience has been quite interesting. I've had some great feedback, and then again i've had some terrible feedback. I guess it all evens out in the end, but what gets to me the most is when I go to their work I find the same spelling errors and weird writing quips as I have. I write fiction and sometimes I write stories that could never happen and I get people saying"You need to study up on what your talking about before you write" well I wasn't trying to be real, I was attempting to write something unreal maybe even unfathomable simply because I like to write.

Some of us on this site will never be a story writer that writes correctly, some of us just wanna write without worrying about how long our paragraph was, and whether we used the correct commas, periods, exclamations etc.....

Its just fun, relaxing, and it causes such freedom of the mind and heart to just put it out there, and though we appreciate criticism it's not going to change how we write or what we write.
All the so called" Perfessional Authors" who get a charge out of downing others should simply realize you weren't always"Perfessional" and some of us will never be...........

("There I said it and I feel better")
Thanks for listening

Dang!! I was so hoping you would.....(LOL)
Yo Hubby got the real thing.
Thanks for the comment.

Being a Poet myself I absolutely loved it.

Do I wait until chapter eight is written before I start?

well said Cyn, Well Said....
I can feel the good person in you.
God Bless

I enjoyed this story because it hits me close to home.
Everthing has changed for the better in the last twenty-five years, but it was quite scary at the start.
Thanks for bringing back good and bad memories.
The story is fantastic!

Shouldn't this be chapter 1?
Anywho" I thought it was a fantastic write my friend! Good Job!

I've Accepted!

The response I expected from you.....
Thanks and God Bless

Thanks for checking it out. I appreciate that.
God Bless

Thanks for the invite theBlackhand! It is a good premise and I have gone through the experience of someone who had thirty days or so to live and it was the most heartbreaking, I dont know what to say experience I have ever been through. He was my Uncle. So yea, I'll give it a go, even though you have some very opinionated writers chosen who can be quite mean at times If things dont go their way I still wanna play.

Thanks Persephonie for your comment! In my story the Government called this guy an American Terrorist, and the reporters and attorneys didn't use more descriptive and educated tones why? because thats the way I wanted the story to go...
I appreciate someone like you reading my story and deciding it should be told differently...
Go for it show me what ya got....
And if you cant do better... then you're the eight year old that just wanted to be mean...
God Bless..

I too loved where you went with the story Cynthus!
I too agree my first part was Bleak but we all know quite true.......
"Lets keep it real"

How Sad Great Work!

Thank you very much for your comments geek!
I really appreciated your input.

I like your poetry and I like your stories also!
Keep up the good work.

Being a Poet I liked this piece alot!

I liked this! I really did.(Giggle)

Interesting.....

I quite enjoyed this! being a poet myself.

I liked this!

I thought the story amazing!

Thanks nashvillebecker for the comment! Microscope, telescope whatever(LOL) you know what I meant! And as far as the lead is concerned I was hoping someone else would continue it in what ever way they will or may.. Maybe I will write more to the story, but I was trying to get fantastic writers like yourself to continue it from your perspective. Thank you for your vote.

I really liked the story! keep working on it..

I enjoyed the story keep it up!

I enjoyed the story very much!

Good Start! I wonder what next?

This was to me a good read!

Nice work! what now?

Im enjoying it so far, and would read more....

I like the way you wrote this story!
I was Intrigued..

I quite enjoyed and understood you story.
Nice Job!

I was quite intrigued by the story line, and wonder just how many ways this story can go.
Good Work my Friend.

I totally understand what you are saying and will work to improve.
I hope in the future this site will allow authors to go back and fix the mistakes that are noticed by others.
And know that I read your work quite a bit, and truly enjoy it.

I understand and thank you for your comment!
You are a fantastic help when it comes to writing and confidence.

GOd Bless

Great Continuation!

Good job my friend!

I liked where you went with it, and i thought your expression waas admirable.
Great Job!

Enjoyed the story Blackhand, and i knew someone in middle school that was treated similar.
Hope he didn't turn out like this guy.
Good Job!

I absolutely enjoyed where you went with the story! Excellent.

Thanks for the comment, and there will be more to come...

Thanks for the comment, and theres more to come.

Thanks for your comment.

Thanks for your comment I appreciate it very much.

Thanks for feeling what I was trying to do.
I appreciate your comment.

I got a chill thinking about the reality of your writing. The news stations are always telling us of the horrific things people do and I wonder what were they thinking, you just gave us a bit of what they might have been thinking.
Well Done My Friend....