Cool writing friend. Love how you ended it. Quite a cliff hanger :)

So sad and beautiful :( I am definitely going to wait for the next chapter.

You are so kind writerwannabe. I am an Asian from where? Not important. Anyway with the comments I'm getting, I'm sure they will not be proud of me. As with this story, I lost my taste writing this. I'll start with another story. But, I'll be sure to proof read it the next time. Grammatical errors and the tenses are always a problem to me. Have a nice day, friend.

Wow! Thanks writerwannabe. I guess I'll have to work harder :(

LOL! You should have your testimony in writing like this one. Lets send this to the cops. But who would believe an orangutan? I enjoyed reading your story. Thanks!

Chilly tale. Congratulations. A job well done.

You've written it very well. I learned a lot from this. Thanks for posting :)

Wow! Thanks, hebe6405. Great suggestions. Storymash will be a challenge for me. I guess, I better write carefully the next time. I will remember everything you said. You are a very good critic. Have a nice day :)

The usual comment lol! Thanks for noticing. How do you proof read? Is there such a word processor for this? I am not an American. Thanks!

Nice one. I'll wait for your next post :)