Interesting view. I like the flow of your poem

I loved this piece. Great poem!

This story was a grabber it held my interest i couldn't look away until the very end. I liked the flow of the story. Great job

I really liked this tragic story. It held my interest very well.

I am really enjoying your writing style.
I cant help but feel for her. How tragic the loss

I liked how this chapter was more of person to person conversation it was nice to get to know the characters from their actions.

I'm new to storymash but this piece is very good and i am glad i read it.

Very good piece. Good write

i really enjoyed your poem

I enjoyed the vividness of the dream and at the beginning of the chapter with your choice of words for the word penis it made me laugh reading Throbbing tomahawk of love.