Discussion of "Running from the Shame" by srvixen
dkk4510 3 years, 7 months ago
Okay, same rushed feeling in some parts as the first one, but the storyline moved forward nicely. Two things, when you are saying something like '12 children', it's always best to write out twelve instead of using the numbers. Writing 101. Secondly, "that fateful night" be careful when you use phrases like that. They tend to sound a bit cliche and over-dramatic. Use your imagination, I know you've got it in you. Good job. Will you be continueing this?
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srvixen 3 years, 7 months ago
Again thank you for your comment, it is greatly appreciated. I can honestly say that the reason I didn't write out the number 12 is because I just learned throughout my academic courses (just about to graduate college) that for any number that exceeds the single digits should be put in numerical form and not written form. But I can see where it would be a bit hard and should be done for story purposes. I will also be sure to add in a more creative flair, hopefully once the complete idea is out of my head (I write about a chapter a day since I started this the other day) I will be able to combine it all and pretty it up with bells and whistles. Right now I am just so happy to be writing again, thanks to some unknown inspiration that came to me on my own family outing, that I haven't stopped to make things pretty. =D
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alharris 3 years, 6 months ago
Thanks for the reminder of the number rule. I believe that one of the strengths of SM is the passing along, reinforcement, or at the very least acknowledgement of traditional writing rules of thumb.
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