Discussion of "Dirty Laundry - the new chapter 1" by shadinah

Great chapter, Shad. You have a wonderful style that keeps the reader reading. The pacing at the end - perfect. Well done!

Thanks, Shad! You were right...three chapters into one works great. Before I mash:

I love this story. Your characters are totally real as are the reactions of the parents, slowly plodding their way through possibilities until the final sentence...;o).

A couple of my favorite authors are adept at taking normal life, inserting a disconcerting event...not serious or dangerous, at first...but, then they take that event into a completely weird, scary or dangerous direction.

That's what you did here and I love it! ;o)

Great piece! I loved it as much as I did the first time it was up :) Can't wait to see what happens next!

UGH! WHAT HAPPENED!?!? I hat cliff-hangers! I'll definitely be back to find out what happened.

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PenPaperPassion - this is a repost of an earlier posting by shadinah. It was reposted as part of a new project that several of us have started here..see the Forum - Miscellaneous entry title, "Let's shake things up" for more info and you can also figure out how to follow the stories as they progress...;o)

Shadinah,

This is a great beginning chapter. I love how the mother rationalizes what might have been cause of what she found in the hamper. It rings so true.

Looking forward to the continuations.

Thanks - I had really hoped this would be mashed, because I had no idea where it was going. So glad we're "shaking things up"!

As the father of seven, you nailed the parent point of view with poise and creativity. The relationship tween mom and dad was also dead on. The marital universe hasn't changed from your generation to mine.

Outstanding Shadinah! I exspecially loved the part saying something to the effect that all her kids are quick to tell on nuasances caused by their siblings, gosh knows mine are that way! I can't wait for my turn to mash it!

Shad--

Really engaging first chapter. I liked the teeth-gnashing irritation that Addie has with Ron. It gives the situation a bit more depth and keeps it from getting too heavy right off the bat. Also, the dialogue between Addie and Joey was fantastic.

Well done all around. Good on ya.