TuBeDrunk, I love your bit on attitude in your comments. It is exactly what I needed to read today as I was feeling somewhat down as you sounded in your story. Even fickle writers need love.

Thank you for taking the reins. I thought I knew where I wanted to take the story, but kept getting stuck. The only critique I have is you made a reference to our mothers as being young, while in my chapter I described them as "old enough to be our Grandmothers". Other than that, you've done very well and I appreciate that you've chosen my story to continue.

I've been rolling this idea around in my head for a while. You've encouraged me to continue. Thank you.

This story can stand alone as a short story or be continued in another chapter and I like that. The writer gives the reader a glimpse of Jonathan's pain and anger so that the reader wants to almost cheer him on.

ARHD I think you've been in my mind. I want to put a lot of thought into this and possibly write the next chapter.

Very entertaining and well written. Loads of possiblities that get my creative juices flowing.

If aptriplett is going to be a writing critic, he should learn to spell.

I enjoy a good vampire tale and this one fits the bill although I did get a little confused. Sevver seems to be the predator at first and then Armani Guy took over. All in all, it's a good time.

Thank you. I'm thrilled and flattered.

Thank you, StoryMash, for being a great outlet.