I stand corrected...too many thoughts in my head!! lol. And I think at the time I wrote this, my thoughts were that the mayor figured a fuss was the last thing he wanted. Ugh, is chapter 3 over yet? lol

honeygloom - thanks for the comment. If you note, though, I never said anyone filed off the bus and when she does get on the bus it is completely empty (I never mentioned anyone was on it). I can assure you it was not rushed and was thought out, I guess I just wasn't clear enough in my process w/ the children...but hey, we all live and learn and all your comments have been extremely helpful and will definitely weigh in when I write another chapter! Thank you!!

Aggeloi and Katrina - thank you very much for your comments and critiques. This was only my second effort at a Mash, so I live, read, write and certainly learn! Hopefully my effort for Chapter 4 will turn out a bit better. Again, thanks for the critiques!!

Thanks Shadinah! Yeah, I am really getting land blasted for the hanging up the cell phone thing...obviously a poor choice. Good point about the arm being bare...and I definitely should have used the word cement or sidewalk instead of floor...just a poor word choice on my part.

This is only my second or third go round at mashing and I am loving it! Thanks a bunch for your comment and vote.

I think ur comment is awesome and thank u for it as well as your vote....I don't mind getting slammed for a "mistake" bc that is how we all learn!! Thank u for all ur comments, if I weren't on vacation and on my iPhone I would address ur other comments! LOL.

dogdeity-thanks so much for the vote and comment...with the confrontation that occurred in chapter two b/t Ms. B and the parents I just had to get irene in there...I would have used her husband but was an obvious choice and frankly portrayed as too much of a wimp! LOL. Thanks again for reading and commenting...I am new here but really love what this site provides!

Thanks writer! Yeah, I missed the boat on the phone thing, oh well, so be it...next time though!! I am not European, but I see what you are saying...I have a pet peeve about turning on the lights and switching on the lights, etc...lol. Thanks for the vote and comment!

WB - Eternal took my comment! As I sat here and read the story, all I kept saying to myself was "I would have never taken it down this road, and obviously no one else did either". I really enjoyed that she may not be an FBI agent after all, very interesting and creative. I had an issue with her being a criminal in the past...I felt as if that was something almost too much out of left field, given the background we have already been provided about her. It was well done, and I look forward to reading your next chapter to see what road you lead us all down!

Geesh, a second one from you? I liked the story line of your first entry a bit better, but it does not take away from the fact that you writing is very good. Not much else to say here - as always, I enjoy reading your posts!

Annalia - this was a very nice effort. I would say the few things that bothered me were some grammatical missteps and the confusion of Jake being punished. Otherwise, you ideas were very creative and well thought out, I just think a your story would have likely come out better if you were not in between calls at work (he he). I have tried it before, and it doesn't work lol. All in all, nice effort and you get 3.0 from me.