Discussion of "The highway" by philly1

Come on gang it's a suspense story, very easy to add to..

Your stuff is written pretty well. One suggestion, is that it'd break it up into paragraphs, it'd make your pieces a lot easier to read. The mind seems to wander in the face of all that uniformity. Keep at it!

I have to agree with Nate, here. I enjoyed the writing, but the structure made it hard to follow. Nice work, all in all. Maybe I'll take a crack at a chapter, soon.

Feel free to read any of mine... (wink wink)

/shameless self-promotion.

I found like a billion comments you left to read your work so I came to read it! XD

One helpful suggestion, in writing it's often thought best to type out numbers up to nine. I personally go up to 100, Ninety nine gets typed :P

Just forty miles north of L.A? Deep snow ever?? It might be better placed in Oregon, or somewhere that gets real winter. A couple, a trucker, and a couple of other guys...I also came to read after seeing you advertise - but I need to be tantalized or I lose interest. Besides a mutual highway inconvenience, what makes these people special? I would try to become each of them to develop the characters. Sometimes they just take off on their own. Good luck.