I quickly wrote & published this yesterday. Today I read it and realized how horrible it was. Too bad I can't delete it, but maybe someone can add a chapter to redeem it...

This chapter was very well written and I really enjoyed reading it. The only critique I have is that it doesn't fully continue the first chapter -I don't think Jared is the boyfriend, he's the boyfriend's friend and Johnny isn't the brother. (Though I think the author of the second chapter intially changed that.)

I thought this chapter was perfect. When I wrote chapter 3 I had no plan for what was actually going to be in the cake, but the cat...that was unexpected to say the least.