I appreciate your critique even more now that I have read some of your writing. I love that you have taken the time to write carefully - to spell correctly, punctuate, craft a sequence of events. Excellent.

I LOVE what you've done with Meredith. You caught her EXACTLY. Thanks for writing the next chapter!

Thanks for taking the time to give me feedback. I appreciate it. I will work on setting the scene better in future. I am not sure I can do much about the dialogue, since, believe it or not, that is how my group of friends actually speak to each other. Perhaps it is my demographic. I'll try to listen more carefully when I am out with friends at how other people talk.

Thanks for taking the time to give me feedback. I appreciate it. I will work on setting the scene better in future. I am not sure I can do much about the dialogue, since, believe it or not, that is how my group of friends actually speak to each other. Perhaps it is my demographic. I'll try to listen more carefully when I am out with friends at how other people talk.