norm
Date Joined: Nov. 2, 2007
Last Login: March 27, 2008
Last Login: March 27, 2008
5 Comments by norm
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norm 11 months, 4 weeks ago
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The author has to publish the chapter before we can vote on it. :( |
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| 2 | norm 1 year ago Context Guilt about lying about your "Jewish Guilt", ha! I always thought it was speelled schlep but looking it up shlep seems to be alternate speilling. Hmmm, you need to publish it, so, we can vote on it! | |
| 1 | norm 1 year ago Context Hilarious. Love how I could probably recognize this guy walking down the street even though you didn't give a word of description. Excellent example of important writer's lesson of "show, don't tell". | |
| 1 | norm 1 year ago Context Great opening line. But the first paragraph got me confused as to what was happening exactly. And later there was some dialog, I think, without the typical "quotes" and separate paragraphs. And the ending is kind of a spoiler/leap. The untold, unexplained is often creepier. Let the reader get carried away imagining many different scary endings instead of just the one you provide. I'd ended it on "It would all be over soon." And on StoryMash the readers could add the scary endings they imagine. | |
| 2 | norm 1 year ago Context Dialog can be hard, good job. I only wish I had some idea about shakers, operas, and females so I could continue this story. | |
6 Chapters by norm
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-- /5.0 - created on Dec 01, 2007 - no comments
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-- /5.0 - created on Nov 08, 2007 - 3 comments - start of story
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3.3/5.0 - published Nov 03, 2007 - 4 comments (preview)
Just read it, it's freakin short.
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Fabulous Gathering of Writers #1 [norm,ang,jen,jeff] my old writing group in San Francisco
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"It's Over" by norm
3.8/5.0 - published Nov 03, 2007 - 7 comments (preview)
This short piece is from a writing exercise I did with my old writing group in San Francisco.
Using "fighting with boyfriend" write for 10 minutes practicing dialog.
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4.2/5.0 - published Nov 03, 2007 - 15 comments (preview)
Alphon works on Orbital3, an agricultural production space station. Like countless workers before him and the innumerable throngs that will surely follow he's stuck with a crappy job and struggles to get by. Right now all he wants is a donut.
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