honeygloom 5 years, 4 months ago
The first part is confusing. Why did Maybel jump into the well? Was the hair Grace’s or the person mentioned in the first chapter? If it was Grace’s why would she throw her hair in the well? And why is there no mention of the first person in the well? By the second part we’ve completely lost sight of anything that happened in the first chapter. I’m sorry, this just didn’t fit the first chapter for me at all.
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nayrj84 5 years, 4 months ago
Fair enough. In my mind, the third chapter would be what ties things together, kind of like a movie that starts at the ending, but next time I MASH I will be more clear
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