Discussion of "Bad Tips" by nashvillebecker

Bravo. Another really well written chapter.
Its so cool how your Character from 'Blood Donor' only pops up near the end.
Another odd bit of storytelling, and I still feel like its building up to something better.
I wonder if your next installment will continue to build character for Dennis or if we may
see an entirely different scenario where possibly Abigail pops up toward the end.
Cant wait to find out!

I like the further insight into Dennis through his appearance. Good installment overall.

I like the way you think. Your writing isn't linear. You have this ability to weave many different stories together creating a web of intrigue, if you will. I wish I could do that. My brain works completely differently. It makes it hard for me to even think of a next chapter. Incredible!

Abagail!>!? so familiar....

:-)

Sorry Nash but I didn't find this a good mash. Great read though. The reason for this is...this jumps straight from a scene where Dennis is giving blood to one where Denis acts as a bouncer. Yes..yes I know building character. But building character can be done in many other ways. Thus far this chapter did not really forward the plot one bit except for showing that Dennis was a great guy... I have never seen this done before jumping from one complete story line to the another in the time-line of one chapter? That could be a good thing or a bad thing. "Weaving the story line"? Don't think you can do this by jumping around..perhaps this would have been better placed like a chapter later?
My vote 2.5....(due to the mash quality; not the writing).

Sorry Nash but I didn't find this a good mash. Great read though. The reason for this is...this jumps straight from a scene where Dennis is giving blood to one where Denis acts as a bouncer. Yes..yes I know building character. But building character can be done in many other ways. Thus far this chapter did not really forward the plot one bit except for showing that Dennis was a great guy... I have never seen this done before jumping from one complete story line to the another in the time-line of one chapter? That could be a good thing or a bad thing. "Weaving the story line"? Don't think you can do this by jumping around..perhaps this would have been better placed like a chapter later?
My vote 2.5....(due to the mash quality; not the writing).

I think it is another resounding 5. It doesn't matter where the story is going. I suggest that the reader suspend all preconceptions of what a story is supposed to be. Nashvillebecker, I look forward to finding everything you have written here and reading every word.

Nash, I really enjoy your writing. RE one of your other chapters, I found a crime that starts with D. ;)