Discussion of "Is It Getting Hot in Here, or Is It Just Me?" by nashvillebecker

check the new entry on my profile page please

ok... here's how it will go...

Psycho1_77 = #1
dogdiety11 = #2
honeygloom = #3
Elevatormusic = #4
Shadowman =#5
Houlgrave =#6
nashvillebecker = #7
Cheeseliker = #8

These are your author numbers... also, these are the storyline numbers, as they are the storyline you will start. I want to shoot for a max of 6 weeks for timeframe... all chapters for all 8 stories must meet this deadline... I am going to post this on a story on each of your pages... If you cannot meet a deadline, there are 2 subs you may contact and use, I will inform them that they will be alternates because they wanted to take part but did not get in fast enough... they are writerwannabe and wsells... you may sub out to either of them or any other author taking part in this endeavor.

The chosen start chapter will be October Chill because it has a lot of potential...

Each storyline will have a unique name, but, to keep things from getting confusing, each subsequent chapter will start with the name of the storyline, colon, then your chapter name...the way that my Cry-baby Bridge series is titled through the subsequent chapters, if you are unsure of what I mean, check it out... this will help keep us all organized... once all 8 initial Chapter 2's are published, I will break down the randomized chapter assignments and post them for everyone to look at so that I may use the storyline names to assign them out... I will post them as a comment on THE ORIGINAL POST that I made announcing this endeavor... It will be the responsibility of each of you to check back to see the assignments AND comment to acknowledge... Sunday is going to be the official start, so 6 weeks from then, we should all be finished... good luck to each and every one of you... and have as much fun with this as possible... if this works out well, I plan to host another and any one of you may feel free to do the same, I just hope I get invited to take part...lol...

Nash, I am speechless....well, not quite...lol. This is excellent...make that brilliant writing. It amazes me... no, it sickens me to think that you are not wallowing in fame and money. I've read novels, published..people paid money for novels, that can't touch your style, imagination or descriptive skills. I was right there, in that office. I felt Devon's discomfort, I saw the temps green eyes....well, now I am speechless!

Great chapter here. Quite a tortured character this Devon is. What a brutal psychological disorder to live with, and you describe his thoughts and feelings quite well.

Wow Nash, is there anything you don't know everything about:)You are incredible! The descriptions, everything, simply superb.

This chapter is a great beginning for a novel. Is it hot in here or is it me lol lol lol the title kills me. Anyway, a character worth expanding.

This has a strong resemblance to formula writing. Male character A, male character B, female character A, etc. There's lots of dialogue, short paragraphs, some description. Eventually male character A and female character A get together for some hot, steamy, illicit sex, after experiencing a number of obstacles in their path. Not a lot distinguishes this piece from thousands of novels that have already been published, except the pacing of the plot. The sex and romance bit has been too heavily foreshadowed too early on.

Hmm. Interesting comment.

That's one direction it could take. Or Devon's internal burn could manifest itself physically and he could accidentally burn Tara to death. Or Devon could find Tara incredibly annoying and she falls for Joe. Or there could be no romance at all. It's only foreshadowing if something comes to fruition later in the story. It could also be a red herring, a plot twist, or simple character development.

That's the fun of StoryMash - it could go anywhere. I would think the distinguishing component of this story is the pyropsychosis. That's what I took from the first chapter, anyway.