Discussion of "October Chill: One to Remember (2)" by nashvillebecker

Great, great follow, Nash! So many great lines. This was one of my favorites: "Sanity was a short pier and I took a long swim in the ocean beyond." Wonderful look into insanity. What did he do to those girls? Introducing the neighbors as potential characters. Fabulous!

"Cleanse myself like I did my girls." Good God!
I think this string has the most mentally disturbed character of the bunch, and you sucked me right in, Nash. Five-a-lous!

Brilliant! "allocate my euphoria" smashing... how is this nut job not in prison though?

I mean permanently.

Last I heard, you have to be convicted of something before getting sent away for a lifetime. (There's potential inspiration on where the story can go, I s'pose.)

Wow. Positively gripping. This storyline has been a full on demented character sketch, progressively revealing more and more. I think its seclusion so far has been perfectly fitting. And now…the neighbors.
Do they know who they live next to? His history? I suspect they are fixen to find out. I sort of feel sorry for them.
Eh, not really.
Five Star.

Talk about serious inner voice! Wow - that was great. You revealed enough to titillate and leave me wanting more. Fiverrific!

This guy is profoundly insane. This is bone chilling. Most stories don't give me to much of the willies, but Nash...**** wow man.

I'm up next, so I read all of the chapter stories over again. I notice in Elevator's version the girls were in their rooms, seemingly on their beds in fear of Andrew and his "alter ego." Possibly meeting their demise. In Elevator's version Elizabeth is running away from him, I'm supposing meeting her demise here as well. In your version Chloe was naked in the living room being comforted by Natalie and Elizabeth is running towards him when she fell off the steps-dying there.
Should this be considered two different flashbacks and maybe he is confused about the true nature of how they died?
Seem like the premise was set for them to meet their deaths two different ways here.

No offence to you or Elevator, they both are excellent stories. Maybe its just me but it seems that way. Oh well, I shall perservere and do my best.