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Discussion of "Rhapsody in Rhode Island" by moonglow


1 chloe 5 years, 7 months ago Reply

Hi moonglow,
I picked up your story. Really liked the vulnerability of Dee's character. Let me know what you think, wasn't sure where you wanted to take it..mystery, romance...etc.
Chloe


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2 dogdeity11 5 years, 7 months ago Reply

Hi moonglow,
Terrific start for a MASH. You managed to build a solid character, provide conflict, a plot basis, and some mystery. I really liked how you used the 'dear Fran' letter to set the stage. Nicely done.


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1 moonglow 5 years, 7 months ago Reply

Thanks, everyone! I am glad you enjoyed it. I think I'll do a chapter two, as well. I tagged it mystery, romance and thriller, I think! It could go any way. I look forward to seeing what anyone else does with the story!


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1 honeygloom 5 years, 7 months ago Reply

Very nice! A perfect story for a MASH, clever and well written.


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1 moonglow 5 years, 7 months ago Reply

Thanks, honeygloom!! Now, I just need to carve out some time to work on the next chapter...


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1 writerwannabe 5 years, 6 months ago Reply

Late reading, but prompt on commenting. Very well done, moonglow! I, too, liked how you used the "Dear Fran" letter to set the stage. Not only the letter, but the way it was written really established Dee's character. I see chloe mashed it...that, in and of itself, is praise. Well done!


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1 moonglow 5 years, 6 months ago Reply

Thanks! I am glad you enjoyed it! Yes, it is flattering when anyone mashes a story!


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