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Discussion of "appreciating danger" by mnder_410


1 Doveman 2 years, 4 months ago Reply

This needs better structure. Something a little more digestible to the reader than one big paragraph that covers all these different events.

The main character also seemed different when compared to the previous chapter.

Gave it a 2.


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