I can dig it. It grabbed my attention right off the bat. That's half the battle

Yeah there's definitely the danger lurking there in the woods. I can feel it building.

The grammar and flow are all there. I'm just waiting for something to jump out and grab me though...

Thanks a lot. I'm looking forward to getting pretty far out with it. Feel free to mash away

Yeah I have a lot of work to do with this. I'm trying to send him out on a vigilante mission to destroy this girls abusive cop husband...haha who knows, we'll see where it goes

Kinda reminds of the big Lebowski. It's nice, but I think you could cut a lot of the wordiness out and make it easier to read. I like the story and the character a lot, but I had a hard time staying on track.

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Sounds like a deal. I just wrote something if you want to mash it. And I'll gladly reciprocate. If you ever want to get a quick hold of me, my email is 24hourlight@gmail.cim

I wish I could say that it didn't strike a chord. Very nice.

This is pretty nice, I haven't read what goes before it yet though. You ready to start doing the weekly chapter thing?