My bad about the time difference of the television. That was clearly a mistake. However, I was under the impression that the scenes with Barbara were more of a dream state than an actual occurrence. They seemed to be very hazy and unclear.

And also my mother goes to church every day, is as catholic as they come, and still won't hesitate to tell me that I'm an ****.

haha yes and I hate doing research because I'm lazy.

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Just published chapter three of Dead Resolutions. On to the next.

The chapter had me at first but I got to admit that you lost me a little with all the historical stuff in italics. I really felt like I had to trudge through most of it.

On the other had, You did propel the plot a great deal and I give you credit for giving the story some meat. The next person now has a lot to work with.

Awesome!!!

It gripped me and was really intense. Looking forward to working with it.

Yeah I thought it definitely kept up well with the first chapter and was entertaining to read.

But I was a little confused about the scene in the cafe. Were they after Heath?? It seems odd that people would bring such heavy artillery to rob a cafe, everyone knows that baristas are wimps and could be taken down with a simple switchblade or something of the sort.

But in all good job, like I said before it really keeps up with the tempo of the original.

Hey, I'm not really sure what story I'm supposed to be doing next.

The read was very smooth and I really thought the bit about having the shingle on his door was pretty funny. (Reminds me of my parents neighbor...)

The characters seemed to really pop out in 3-D in my mind. Nice going with that.

We'll just have to see where this all goes...

Finally done. Sorry for being tardy, but I wanted to make it good.

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